Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答“有”，再说明这是小学毕业礼物。注意语法：用“a present for graduating from primary school”或“a present when I graduated from primary school”，不能说“for I graduated”。最后补充一个具体细节，例如你常骑车去哪里，避免“I rode my bike”单独出现后显得内容不完整。

例: Yes, I did. My mum gave me a bike as a present when I graduated from primary school. I used to ride it around my neighbourhood and sometimes to the park.

提案: 开头直接回答后，要用连接词把原因或例子串起来，例如“because”或“also”。注意“bikes are popular”后需要用“because”连接完整句子；泛指自行车时用“bikes”，不要用“the bikes”或单数“bike”。最后一句没有说完，应补全“enjoy our time”之类的表达。可以删掉口语填充词“umm”，并用一两个具体用途支撑观点。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute to school or work. They are also a convenient way to get around parks and enjoy some time outdoors.

× And that was a present for I graduated from my primary school.

✓ And it was a present to celebrate my graduation from primary school.

“for I graduated”不能用来表达“为了庆祝我小学毕业”，因为这里的 for 后面不能直接接这个形式的从句。可以改成“to celebrate my graduation”（为了庆祝我的毕业）。

× Yes, I think that bikes are popular people usually use the bikes to go to school and work from Monday to Friday and we often use bike to umm go to the parks and enjoy our.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular because people usually use them to go to school and work from Monday to Friday. We also often use bikes to go to parks and enjoy ourselves.

“bikes are popular”后面直接接“people usually use...”会造成句子连接不当。此处可加 because，说明自行车受欢迎的原因；也可以用句号分开两个完整句子。

× We often use bike to umm go to the parks.

✓ We often use bikes to go to parks.

bike 是可数名词，单数形式前通常需要冠词；表示一般意义上的自行车时，用复数 bikes 更自然，而且复数泛指时通常不加 the。

× ...and enjoy our.

✓ ...and enjoy ourselves.

enjoy 后面需要接宾语。our 是物主限定词，不能单独作宾语；主语 we 和宾语指同一群人时，应使用反身代词 ourselves。