Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答问题，再补充一到两个具体细节。注意使用过去时：用“when I was a child”“my parents bought”，不要混用现在时和过去时。删去重复表达，并将“a big city from China”改为“a large city in China”。

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was about seven because they wanted me to get more exercise. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: 用一般现在时回答“现在是否流行”，并注意名词单复数，例如“bikes are popular”。给出清晰、具体的理由或例子；避免反复说“somewhere/anywhere”，并补完整句子，不要以“so”结尾。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They’re convenient for short trips, and people can use them to get to nearby shops or public transport stations. Bike-sharing services have also made cycling more accessible.

× Yeah, I have thought back when I were a child.

✓ Yeah, I have thought back to when I was a child.

这里谈论的是过去的童年经历，因此应使用过去式“was”，不能用“were”。另外，“think back”后面通常接介词“to”，所以应说“think back to when…”来表示“回想起……的时候”。

× Uh, it is because I when I was a child, I live in my hometown.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I lived in my hometown.

原句中“it is because I”和“when I was a child”结构混在一起，导致句子不完整且重复。可以直接用“When I was a child”引出时间状语，再接完整主句。

× Uh, it is because I when I was a child, I live in my hometown.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I lived in my hometown.

“when I was a child”指过去的时间，因此描述当时居住的情况应使用过去式“lived”，而不是现在式“live”。

× It's in Huizhou, a big city from China,

✓ It's in Huizhou, a big city in China,

表达某个城市位于某个国家时，应使用“in China”。“from China”通常表示来自中国，而不是说明城市所在的位置。

× and this is very big city,

✓ and this is a very big city,

“city”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。这里应在“very”前加不定冠词“a”，构成“a very big city”。

× so that uh my dad and mom buy me a bike

✓ so my dad and mom bought me a bike

句子讲的是童年时父母给“我”买自行车的事情，属于过去的动作，因此“buy”应改为过去式“bought”。

× so I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ so I had a bike when I was a child.

“when I was a child”明确表示过去的时间，因此表示当时拥有自行车应使用过去式“had”，而不是现在式“have”。

× Yeah, I think bike is very popular in my country in the past.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes were very popular in my country in the past.

这里是在泛指自行车这一类交通工具，通常使用复数“bikes”。同时，“in the past”表示过去，因此对应的系动词应使用“were”。

× Uh because what I'm saying about is my city is very big

✓ Because what I'm saying is that my city is very big.

原句中“What I'm saying about is…”结构不完整，而且后面直接接另一个完整句子，连接不当。可以去掉多余的“about”，并在“is”后加“that”引出所说的内容。

× we need to uh have a bike to go somewhere to uh anywhere

✓ we need to have a bike to go somewhere or anywhere

“go”后面可以直接接“somewhere”或“anywhere”表示去某处，不需要再加介词“to”。表示两种可能时，可以用“or”连接。