Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then explain whose bike you used. Keep the response concise and use past-tense forms consistently: “didn’t have,” “borrowed,” and “rode.” Say “my brother’s bike,” and avoid fillers or repeated phrases such as “all my entire childhood.”

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. I often borrowed my brother’s bike and rode it around our neighborhood. I enjoyed using it throughout my childhood.

提案: Make your opinion clear and avoid contradicting yourself: if bikes are not popular, say so directly. Use “country,” not “company,” and describe the government’s current efforts with the present continuous (“is trying”). Link the reason and example clearly, and refer to bikes as “them.”

例: Bikes aren’t very popular in my country yet, but the government is trying to encourage more people to use them. This is partly because the population is growing and many city streets are congested. Cycling could help reduce traffic and make short journeys easier.

× No, I don't have a bike when I wear when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about a past time, so use the past-tense form didn't have. The phrase when I wear is an incorrect repetition; use when I was a child to express the time clearly.

× I borrow my BR uh, my brother bike and I drove it umm, all my entire childhood.

✓ I borrowed my brother's bike and drove it throughout my childhood.

Use borrowed, the past-tense form of borrow, because the student is describing a childhood experience. Use my brother's bike to show that the bike belonged to the brother, and throughout my childhood is a clear way to express the duration.

× But for now our government tried to make it more popular.

✓ But now our government is trying to make it more popular.

For now indicates a current effort, so use the present progressive is trying rather than the past tense tried. Now is more natural here than for now when describing what the government is currently doing.

× Because of, uh, the population of the country and the traffic jams, all the streets.

✓ The government is trying to make cycling more popular because of the country's population and traffic jams on all the streets.

The original phrase all the streets is left unattached, so the thought is incomplete. Connect it to traffic jams with the preposition on, and include the cause in a complete sentence.