Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提到了自行车的颜色和父母教你骑车，细节不错。注意使用过去时：讲童年经历时用“rode”，而不是“write”；“it was pink with a brown helmet”容易让人误解自行车带有头盔，可改为“the bike was pink, and I had a brown helmet”。开头的“got a lot of gifts from other people”与问题关系不大，可以删去；结尾可用更自然的表达说明自行车对你的意义。

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a pink bike when I was a child, and I had a brown helmet to wear with it. They taught me how to ride it, and I used to cycle around our neighborhood. It felt like a good friend because I spent so much time with it.

提案: 回答直接，并用价格、便利性和共享单车举例，内容较充实。注意主谓和代词一致：复数“bikes”应搭配“they/them”，而不是“it”。“I sometimes run by myself during the weekend”与自行车话题衔接不清楚；如果想表达自己周末骑车，可以说“go for a bike ride”。建议减少填充词，并用连接词把例子与观点自然地连起来。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they’re affordable and convenient for short journeys. Many people use them to get to work or to nearby shops, and bike-sharing schemes are common in larger cities. For instance, I often see people riding shared bikes to the bus stop. I sometimes go for a bike ride at the weekend, too.

× Uh, when I go out, uh, I I would definitely write on it and my parents taught me how to do this.

✓ Uh, when I went out, I would definitely write on it, and my parents taught me how to do this.

这段话是在回忆童年经历，因此描述过去反复发生的情况时，应使用过去时“went”，而不是现在时“go”。与“would”搭配的时间从句也应保持过去的时间背景。

× Most people use it to commute and many cities have bike sharing systems.

✓ Most people use them to commute, and many cities have bike-sharing systems.

这里的“it”指代前面的复数名词“bikes”，所以应使用复数代词“them”。注意代词的单复数要与其所指代的名词保持一致。