Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答“有”，再按时间顺序说明是谁给你买的、你小时候骑车的困难以及后来是否学会。注意过去的事情要使用过去时，例如用“when I was five”而不是“when I'm five”；“be honest”应改为“to be honest”，“studied it”应改为“learned to ride it”。避免重复“by”，并可加入一个具体细节，例如摔倒的经历。

例: Yes, I did. My dad got me a bike when I was five, but I wasn't very good at riding it at first. I fell off a few times and got some scrapes, but I eventually learned how to ride.

提案: 回答方向明确，但只提到一个公园，无法充分支持“在你们国家是否流行”这一较宽泛的问题。可以先给出清晰观点，再用公园里的观察作为例子，并补充骑车的原因或其他场景。注意说“ride bikes”和“after dinner”；删掉句尾的“like yeah”，让表达更自然、简洁。

例: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in my country. For example, in Bytown Park, I often see children riding bikes with their parents after dinner. It’s a fun way for families to spend time together, and some people also cycle to get around.

× Here's my dad brought it to me when I'm five years old, but be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.

✓ My dad brought it to me when I was five years old, but to be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.

“Here's”不能直接放在“My dad brought...”这个完整句子前面，否则会形成不正确的句子结构。可以直接以“My dad”作主语开始句子。另外，固定表达是“to be honest”，不能说“be honest”。

× Here's my dad brought it to me when I'm five years old, but be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.

✓ My dad brought it to me when I was five years old, but to be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.

“When I was five years old”描述的是过去的时间，因此应使用过去式“was”，而不是现在式“am”。讲述过去发生的事情时，要注意将相应的动词改为过去式。

× I always get hurt by by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.

✓ I always get hurt by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.

“by”在这里重复出现了一次。表达“因为骑车而受伤”时，使用一次“by riding”即可。检查口语或文字中的重复词，避免同一个介词连续出现。

× Yes, if you go to Bytown Park, you can always see a lot of people like children and their parents riding the bike together after the dinner like yeah.

✓ Yes, if you go to Bytown Park, you can always see a lot of people, like children and their parents, riding bikes together after dinner.

这里泛指人们骑自行车，应使用复数“bikes”，不需要定冠词“the”。“Dinner”泛指日常晚餐时通常不加“the”，所以说“after dinner”。