Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答问题，再补充一两个具体细节。注意使用自然、完整的句子：“the small bike”应改为“a small bike”；“smaller than my elder brother”比较对象不合理，可以说自行车适合你的身高；“but is it was”有语法错误，且最后一句不完整。

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was a child. It was a little too small for my older brother, but it was just the right size for me. I often rode it around the neighborhood with my friends.

提案: 回答“取决于什么”后，要清楚说明不同群体的情况。将“popular in some younger people”改为“popular among some young people”；“elder people”可改为“older people”；“choose car or bus”需加冠词或使用复数；“to try”在这里意思不清楚，可改为“to travel”或直接说出出行目的。避免用“always”作过于绝对的概括。

例: It depends on the area. Bikes are quite popular among young people, especially in cities where cycling is convenient. Older people may be more likely to take a bus or drive, particularly for longer journeys. So, I’d say bikes are common, but their popularity varies by age and location.

× It was smaller than my elder brother.

✓ It was smaller than my elder brother's bike.

这里把自行车直接和哥哥进行大小比较，比较对象不一致。应补出“哥哥的自行车”（my elder brother's bike），使比较双方都是自行车。

× but is it was very useful.

✓ but it was very useful.

句子中重复使用了两个谓语形式“is”和“was”，结构错误。描述童年时的情况应使用过去时“was”，并删除多余的“is”。

× Why hang out with my.

✓ I used to hang out with my brother.

原句缺少明确的主语，且“my”后面缺少名词，句子结构不完整。根据上下文可补出主语“I”和名词“brother”。

× Bikes are popular in some younger people, but elder people always choose car or bus to try or go to school or work.

✓ Bikes are popular among some younger people, but older people always choose a car or a bus to go to school or work.

表达“在某些年轻人中受欢迎”时，介词应使用“among”，而不是“in”。

× Bikes are popular in some younger people, but elder people always choose car or bus to try or go to school or work.

✓ Bikes are popular among some younger people, but older people always choose a car or a bus to go to school or work.

“elder”通常用于表示家庭关系中的年长者，如“my elder brother”；泛指年龄较大的人时，使用“older people”更恰当。

× Bikes are popular in some younger people, but elder people always choose car or bus to try or go to school or work.

✓ Bikes are popular among some younger people, but older people always choose a car or a bus to go to school or work.

“car”和“bus”在这里是单数可数名词，前面需要加冠词。可以说“a car or a bus”。