Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then explain the family rule in a clear and grammatically complete way. Use the past tense consistently (“weren’t allowed”) because you are describing your childhood. Avoid fillers and finish your final thought; you could clarify whether your sister’s bicycle was shared or whether you wanted one yourself.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. In my family, girls weren’t encouraged to learn skills like cycling or swimming. My sister did have a bicycle, though, and I sometimes wished I could ride it too.

提案: Give a direct answer and use “popular” rather than “famous” for bikes. Avoid repeating “yes,” “very,” and “like”; use the plural “bikes” or the phrase “a bike.” Make your examples more specific and connect them with a linking phrase such as “for example” or “because.”

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. People often use them to go to nearby shops or markets, since cycling is convenient and inexpensive. In busy areas, they can also be easier to park than cars.

× No, I did not have any bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I did not have any bikes when I was a child.

In a negative sentence, any is commonly followed by a plural countable noun when referring to none of that item. Use bikes rather than the singular bike.

× I grew up in a very conservative Muslim family where we are not allowed to teach a girl child any kind of umm, skills like driving or swimming, etcetera.

✓ I grew up in a very conservative Muslim family where we were not allowed to teach a girl child any kind of skills, like driving or swimming.

The sentence describes a rule that applied during the speaker's childhood, so the past-tense form were not allowed is needed instead of are not allowed.

× I grew up in a very conservative Muslim family where we are not allowed to teach a girl child any kind of umm, skills like driving or swimming, etcetera.

✓ I grew up in a very conservative Muslim family where we were not allowed to teach a girl child any kind of skill, like driving or swimming.

After any kind of, the noun is generally singular. Use skill rather than skills.

× And when I was a child, there was a, a bicycle, uh, for my sister, but I.

✓ When I was a child, there was a bicycle for my sister.

The phrase but I introduces a clause that is left unfinished. End the sentence after the complete idea, or finish the clause after but with a complete thought.

× Bikes are very, very famous in my country and, uh, many people use bike for daily activities like like, uh, going nearby places for markets or any kind of grocery shopping and for immediate, uh, commute to buy some medicines.

✓ Bikes are very, very famous in my country, and many people use bikes for daily activities, like going to nearby places for markets or grocery shopping and for an immediate commute to buy some medicines.

Bike is a countable noun used here to refer to bikes in general, so it should be plural: bikes.

× Bikes are very, very famous in my country and, uh, many people use bike for daily activities like like, uh, going nearby places for markets or any kind of grocery shopping and for immediate, uh, commute to buy some medicines.

✓ Bikes are very, very famous in my country, and many people use bikes for daily activities, like going to nearby places for markets or grocery shopping and for an immediate commute to buy some medicines.

Use the preposition to after going when describing movement toward a destination: going to nearby places. The phrase going nearby places is missing to.

× Bikes are very, very famous in my country and, uh, many people use bike for daily activities like like, uh, going nearby places for markets or any kind of grocery shopping and for immediate, uh, commute to buy some medicines.

✓ Bikes are very, very famous in my country, and many people use bikes for daily activities, like going to nearby places for markets or grocery shopping and for an immediate commute to buy some medicines.

Commute is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use an before immediate because immediate begins with a vowel sound.