Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提供了购买时间和学会骑车的细节，但“a bag”与问题不符，应改为“a bike”；“in my second year of my primary school years”和“in that period of time”表达冗长、不自然。建议直接说明父母什么时候买车，再补充你如何学会骑车，避免重复表达时间。

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was in my second year of primary school, and I learned to ride it soon afterwards.

提案: 回答表达了自行车受欢迎的观点，并举了通勤和个人经历作为支持，但存在多处听起来像识别或发音错误的词：“Becky”应为“bikes”，“wider”应为“whether”，“need it back”应为“need one for commuting”。注意使用完整、自然的句子，例如“whether you are a worker or a student”；“And”后不必重复引出个人例子，可用“Personally”衔接。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Whether people are workers or students, many of them ride bikes to commute because they are convenient and affordable. Personally, I cycle to school, and quite a few of my classmates do the same.

× Yes, Becky is very popular in our country because wider you are a worker or students, you need it back for commute, you know.

✓ Yes, Becky is very popular in our country because, whether you are a worker or a student, you need it back for commute, you know.

这里表达“无论你是……还是……”，应使用 whether...or... 结构。原句中的 wider 不能表达这个意思。建议用 whether 引出选择范围，并用 or 连接两个选项。

× Yes, Becky is very popular in our country because wider you are a worker or students, you need it back for commute, you know.

✓ Yes, Becky is very popular in our country because, whether you are a worker or a student, you need it back for commute, you know.

worker 前有 a，是单数；与它并列的名词也应保持单数形式，并加不定冠词 a。因此应说 a worker or a student，而不是 a worker or students。

× Yes, Becky is very popular in our country because wider you are a worker or students, you need it back for commute, you know.

✓ Yes, Becky is very popular in our country because, whether you are a worker or a student, you need it back for commuting, you know.

介词 for 后面若接动词，通常使用动名词形式。commute 是动词，因此这里应改为 commuting。也可以改写为 to commute，例如 you need it to commute。

× And As for me, I'm a student, I need to ride my bicycle to our school as well as my classmates.

✓ As for me, I'm a student, and I need to ride my bicycle to our school, just like my classmates do.

原句用逗号直接连接两个完整句子，结构不完整；此外，as well as my classmates 放在句末会让人误以为“自行车和同学一起去学校”。建议用 and 连接完整句子，并用 just like my classmates do 表达“和我的同学一样”。