Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and clarify the timeline: say whether you had a bike and when you learned to ride it. Use the natural phrase “ride a bike,” not “drive a bike,” and avoid the contradictory wording “didn't learn” if you did learn at age 12 or 13. Remove fillers and unfinished phrases.

例: I didn’t learn to ride a bike until I was about 12 or 13. At first, I found it difficult to balance, but I kept practising. Once I learned, I enjoyed riding around my neighbourhood.

提案: Give a clear overall opinion first, then explain where or why bikes are popular. Use “bikes” or “cycling” rather than the singular “bike,” and connect your contrasting ideas with a complete linking phrase such as “although” or “however.” Replace the fragment “but also” with a full clause and add a specific example if possible.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular for commuting in my country, although they are common in some towns. Many people use them for exercise, especially along riverside paths or in parks. For example, I often see cyclists riding in groups on weekends.

× When I was a child, I didn't learn eventually to ride a bike or drive a bike. Umm, I think it is about 12 years old or 13 years old when I was, when I learned to ride a bike and have.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't learn to ride a bike until I was about 12 or 13 years old.

The original sentence combines several incomplete and repeated clauses, and the phrase didn't learn eventually is not the natural structure for expressing that you learned at a later age. Use didn't learn ... until ... to show when the learning happened. The phrase and have is also incomplete and should be removed.

× I think it is about 12 years old or 13 years old when I was, when I learned to ride a bike and have.

✓ I think I was about 12 or 13 years old when I learned to ride a bike.

The student is describing an event in the past, so use the past-tense verb was rather than the present-tense is. The phrase I was about 12 or 13 years old is the correct way to state the age.

× I think bike is not so popular today, but also. Popular in the specific town and the bikers are just using it for fitness purposes.

✓ I think bikes are not so popular today, but they are popular in specific towns, and people use them for fitness.

Bike is used to make a general statement, so use the plural form bikes. The plural subject bikes also requires the plural verb are and the plural pronoun them.

× I think bike is not so popular today, but also. Popular in the specific town and the bikers are just using it for fitness purposes.

✓ I think bikes are not so popular today, but they are popular in specific towns, and people use them for fitness.

Popular in the specific town is a sentence fragment because it has no subject or verb, and but also does not complete the contrast. Join the ideas in a complete clause: but they are popular in specific towns. Use a comma to connect the coordinated ideas.