Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly by clearly saying you had a bike. Correct the unnatural phrase “pink basket” to “a pink basket,” and explain what you enjoyed about riding it. “Frightening and so funny” is confusing; choose a clear description such as “exciting” or “fun.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It had a pink basket with a princess design, and my grandparents bought it for me. I often rode it to school or to meet my friends because it was fun and gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with a couple of specific reasons or examples. Use the natural expressions “mountain biking,” “keep fit,” and “bicycles” rather than “pac,” “keep faith,” and “buckets.” Add a linking phrase such as “Additionally” to connect the second point.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers. Many of my friends go mountain biking at weekends because it’s exciting and helps them keep fit. Additionally, some people cycle to nearby places to save money and avoid traffic.

× It was pink basket with a princess design that my grandparents bought for me and I often rode it to school and to meet my friends because it felt frightening and so funny.

✓ It was a pink basket with a princess design that my grandparents bought for me and I often rode it to school and to meet my friends because it felt frightening and so funny.

A singular countable noun such as basket needs an article. Add a before pink basket. The rest of the sentence has no clear error that matches the listed grammar problem types.