Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問には直接答えられており、お父さんが手伝ってくれたという具体的な情報もあります。過去のことなので「I have a bike」は「I had a bike」、「I'm afraid」は「I was afraid」と過去形にしましょう。また、「helped me to ride a bike」は少し繰り返しがあるため、より自然な表現にできます。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I was afraid to ride it on my own. My father helped me learn, and I gradually became more confident.

提案: 「あまり人気がない」という意見と、電車やバスを使う人が多いという理由は述べられています。ただし、回答が「So there are few」で途切れているため、文を最後まで完成させましょう。「most of the people」は「most people」、「the public transportation」は「public transport」とすると自然です。質問への答えを支える具体的な比較を加えると、より伝わりやすくなります。

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people rely on public transport, especially trains and buses. As a result, you don't see many people commuting by bike, particularly in large cities.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child, but I'm afraid of riding a bike by myself.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I'm afraid of riding a bike by myself.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a past time, so have should be changed to its past-tense form, had. The present-tense phrase I'm afraid can remain if the student is describing a fear that continues now.

× I don't think so because most of the people tend to use the public transportation such as trains and buses buses..

✓ I don't think so because most of the people tend to use public transportation such as trains and buses.

Public transportation is used in a general sense here, so it normally does not take the definite article the. The repeated buses has also been removed as a duplication.