Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two supporting details. Use the past-tense phrase “I had a bike,” and avoid repeating “every afternoon.” The phrase “in Premasco” is unclear; use the intended place or time, such as “in primary school.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in primary school. My parents bought it for me, and I practised riding it every afternoon. I really enjoyed cycling around my neighbourhood.

提案: Give a clear answer and explain your view with a specific comparison or reason. Use “own bikes” rather than “have seen our own bike,” and avoid repeating words. Make sure the comparison is grammatically complete—for example, “I think they are more popular in…”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people own one for commuting or getting around their neighbourhood. However, cycling may be even more popular in countries like New Zealand, where more people use bikes regularly.

× Yes, I harbor bike when I was when I was in Premasco my parents bought it for me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was in Premasco. My parents bought it for me.

The question asks about a past experience, so use the past-tense verb had rather than harbor. The repeated when I was is a speech repetition and has been removed for clarity.

× Yes, I harbor bike when I was when I was in Premasco my parents bought it for me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was in Premasco. My parents bought it for me.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a bike when referring to one bike in general.

× I practiced riding it every afternoon. Every afternoon and really enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood.

✓ I practiced riding it every afternoon and really enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood.

The second sentence is incomplete because and really enjoyed has no subject. Join it to the previous sentence, where I serves as the subject for both verbs. The repeated Every afternoon is unnecessary.

× Many people have seen our own bike but but I sports other countries like New Zealand have more bike.

✓ Many people have their own bikes, but I suppose other countries like New Zealand have more bikes.

Their refers back to many people, so it is more appropriate than our. The repeated but has been removed. The unclear phrase I sports has been rendered as I suppose, which fits the sentence's meaning; if that was not the intended phrase, use the word you meant.

× Many people have seen our own bike but but I sports other countries like New Zealand have more bike.

✓ Many people have their own bikes, but I suppose other countries like New Zealand have more bikes.

The sentence refers to bikes generally and to bikes owned by many people, so use the plural form bikes rather than the singular bike.