Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant, vivid, and well developed. To make it slightly more natural, replace “thrilled to own it” with “excited to have it.” You could also shorten the final clause to avoid making the sentence too long.

例: Yes, I did. I was really excited to have my own bike, and I often rode it with my friends in nearby parks. It felt like a little adventure and gave me a real sense of freedom.

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Correct the grammar by saying “a lot of people use bikes” and “many people cycle for exercise.” Avoid fillers such as “umm” and “like,” and replace the incomplete phrase “promote healthy” with “promote a healthy lifestyle.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them to commute to work, while others ride them for exercise. Cycling has become more popular as people try to stay fit and reduce pollution.

× Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country at the moment because, umm, a lot of people using bikes for work and also a lot of like community doing exercise using bike. And currently it's really popular because of people, umm, want to promote like healthy.

✓ Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country at the moment because a lot of people use bikes for work, and many people in my community use them to exercise. They are also popular because people want to promote health.

In the clause a lot of people using bikes for work, using does not function as the main verb. Use the simple present use to describe a general habit. The question asks about current popularity, so the present tense is appropriate.

× Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country at the moment because, umm, a lot of people using bikes for work and also a lot of like community doing exercise using bike. And currently it's really popular because of people, umm, want to promote like healthy.

✓ Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country at the moment because a lot of people use bikes for work, and many people in my community use them to exercise. They are also popular because people want to promote health.

The phrase a lot of community doing exercise using bike is not a complete, well-formed clause. Give the clause a clear subject and finite verb, such as many people in my community use them to exercise. Also, because of must be followed by a noun phrase, not a clause with a subject and verb. Use because people want to promote health.

× Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country at the moment because, umm, a lot of people using bikes for work and also a lot of like community doing exercise using bike. And currently it's really popular because of people, umm, want to promote like healthy.

✓ Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country at the moment because a lot of people use bikes for work, and many people in my community use them to exercise. They are also popular because people want to promote health.

Healthy is an adjective, but the sentence needs a noun as the object of promote. Use health: people want to promote health. This means they want to encourage good health.