Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly first: say whether you had a bike. Use “bike” rather than “break,” and say “I was afraid of getting injured” and “I fell off” for natural phrasing. Reduce fillers and explain briefly what happened and how it affected you.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I was nervous about getting injured, but I tried riding one once and fell off. After that, I didn’t try again.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, cycling is quite popular.” Correct the grammar (“people depend on bikes” or “people use bikes”) and complete your examples. Avoid repeated fillers, and connect your reasons and examples with a linking phrase such as “for example.”

例: Yes, cycling is quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. For example, people often ride bikes to the supermarket, while many children cycle to school. It’s a convenient and affordable way to get around.

× I was afraid of riding a bike to be injured.

✓ I was afraid of riding a bike and getting injured.

After the preposition of, use the -ing form. The phrase to be injured does not fit this construction. Use getting injured to express the feared result.

× I tried to ride the bike, but I fall down, so I didn't try it again.

✓ I tried to ride the bike, but I fell down, so I didn't try it again.

The events happened in the past, so use the past tense fell instead of the present-tense form fall.

× Yes, actually it's popular because...

✓ Yes, actually, they are popular because...

The pronoun refers to bikes, which is plural. Use they are rather than it's, which refers to a singular or uncountable noun.

× People here depends on the biking...

✓ People here depend on biking...

People is a plural subject, so it takes the verb depend, not depends. Do not add -s to the verb with a plural subject.

× People here depends on the biking and their everyday activities and short rides...

✓ People here depend on biking for their everyday activities and short trips...

Use for to show the purpose for which people use bikes. The original wording incorrectly connects depend on biking with their activities.

× ...like to go to supermarket...

✓ ...such as going to the supermarket...

Supermarket is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use the when referring to the supermarket in this context.

× ...short rides, like to go to supermarket or children to go to their school or.

✓ ...short trips, such as going to the supermarket or taking their children to school.

The original list does not use parallel grammatical forms: to go is followed by children to go. Use matching -ing forms, going and taking, to make the examples parallel and complete.