Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then describe the bike using natural phrasing such as “red with a flame design” and “gold-colored wheels.” Use the past tense consistently (“were”), avoid fillers and the unclear phrase “gold medal gold,” and finish with the detail about it being a birthday present.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven. It was red with a flame design and gold-colored wheels. It was a birthday present, so I was especially excited to ride it.

提案: Give a clear answer about whether bikes are popular, and replace the unclear wording “most famous Ledger” and “river Park” with accurate, natural terms. Explain specifically where or why people ride, use “go cycling” rather than “go exercise,” and make a logical comparison if you mention other sports.

例: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in my country, especially in areas with riverside parks. People often ride there for exercise or simply to enjoy the scenery. It may not be as popular as football, but it is a common recreational activity.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was around 7 years old uh, the bike was the red color painted with the flame design and uh wheels are like gold medal gold and that was my birthday gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was around 7 years old. The bike was red and had a flame design, and the wheels were gold, like gold medals. It was a birthday gift.

The phrase the bike was the red color painted is not structured naturally in English. Use was red to describe the bike’s color, and use had a flame design to express the design clearly. Breaking the long sentence into shorter sentences also makes the description easier to follow.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was around 7 years old uh, the bike was the red color painted with the flame design and uh wheels are like gold medal gold and that was my birthday gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was around 7 years old. The bike was red and had a flame design, and the wheels were gold, like gold medals. It was a birthday gift.

The answer describes a bike the student had in childhood, so the description should use the past tense. Change are to were to keep the verb tense consistent with the past context.

× Yes, I think bicycles are most famous Ledger in my country because we have a lot of river Park, so people used to go exercise and go around to to take a bike there.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are most famous Ledger in my country because we have a lot of river parks, so people used to go exercise and go around to to take a bike there.

After a lot of, a countable noun normally needs to be plural. Use river parks rather than river Park when referring to many parks.

× Yes, I think bicycles are most famous Ledger in my country because we have a lot of river Park, so people used to go exercise and go around to to take a bike there.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are most famous Ledger in my country because we have a lot of river parks, so people used to go exercising and go around to to take a bike there.

When go describes taking part in an activity, it is commonly followed by a verb ending in -ing, as in go exercising. Use this pattern for activities such as go swimming or go cycling.

× So I think it's popular lesser than other sports.

✓ So I think it's less popular than other sports.

Use less, not lesser, to form this comparison with the adjective popular. The correct structure is less + adjective + than.