Bike— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
受験者
Yes I did, I had a small green bicycle when I was a child. Uh, that was from my parents as my 7th birthday.
試験官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
受験者
Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Many households own one or two bikes, and people often cycle in parks when they have free time.
評価
総合
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
スコア: 78.0提案: 질문에 직접 답하고 자전거의 색깔과 크기를 덧붙인 점이 좋습니다. 다만 “that was from my parents as my 7th birthday”는 어색한 표현이므로 “My parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday” 또는 “It was a birthday present from my parents”라고 말해 보세요. 불필요한 필러인 “Uh”는 빼고, 자전거를 어떻게 탔는지와 같은 구체적인 내용을 한 가지 더 덧붙이면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 풍부해집니다.
例: Yes, I did. I had a small green bicycle that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday. I used to ride it around our neighborhood with my friends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
スコア: 86.0提案: 질문에 명확히 답한 뒤 가정에서의 보유와 여가 활동을 설명해 답변이 잘 구성되어 있습니다. “Many households”라는 일반적인 주장에 구체적인 상황이나 이유를 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다. 예를 들어 주말에 가족들이 공원에서 함께 자전거를 타는 모습이나, 자전거가 편리하고 운동에도 도움이 된다는 점을 설명할 수 있습니다.
例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many families own one or two, and they often ride them in parks at the weekend. It’s an easy way to exercise and spend time together.
文法
× That was from my parents as my 7th birthday.
✓ That was from my parents for my 7th birthday.
Use 'for' to describe the occasion for which the bicycle was given. 'As' does not express this meaning here.
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