Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再用一两句补充自行车的特点或相关回忆。注意使用正确表达：可说“when I was very young”，表示“买给我”要用“bought it for me”，而不是“brought it for me”。“I remember it a radio”缺少谓语，可改为“it had a radio”；最后一句没有说完，应补充完整原因，或直接删掉。尽量控制在五句以内。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was very young. My parents bought it for me, and it even had a little radio, which I thought was really cool. I rode it around our neighbourhood whenever the weather was nice.

提案: 开头要明确回答自行车在你所在国家是否流行，再说明不同城市的情况。你用成都和重庆作对比的思路很好，但句子过长，建议用“whereas”或“while”连接对比，并拆分句子。注意使用“Chongqing”（重庆）、“hilly/mountainous”（多山的）和“convenient to cycle”（骑车方便）等表达；还可以补充一个具体原因，例如地形或自行车道。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in some parts of China, although it depends on the city. Chengdu is relatively flat, so cycling is a convenient way to get around there. Chongqing, on the other hand, is very hilly, which makes cycling less practical for many people.

× I remember I had a bike when I was very little young.

✓ I remember I had a bike when I was very young.

“Little young”中“little”不能这样修饰“young”，表达“很年轻”时直接说“very young”。

× I remember it a radio.

✓ I remember it had a radio.

“I remember”后面的从句“it a radio”缺少谓语动词，因此句子结构不完整。可在“it”后补上“had”，表示自行车带有收音机。

× I remember it a radio which is super fancy for little girls.

✓ I remember it had a radio, which was super fancy for little girls.

这句话叙述的是小时候的经历，因此描述当时收音机很时髦时，应使用过去式“was”，而不是现在式“is”。

× I just lose it because

✓ I just lost it because

“lose”是现在式；这里讲的是小时候发生的事情，应使用过去式“lost”。“because”后面还需要补充原因，但如果录音在此处中断，则无需臆测后续内容。

× It would be totally different if you live in different cities.

✓ It would be totally different if you lived in different cities.

“would be”表示假设情境时，if 从句通常使用一般过去式，因此应将“live”改为“lived”。

× such as if you live in Chengdu

✓ for example, if you live in Chengdu

“such as”通常后接名词或名词短语，不适合直接引出“if”条件从句。这里可用“for example”引出例子。

× it's more flat

✓ it's flatter

“flat”是单音节形容词，比较级通常加“-er”，所以应说“flatter”，而不是“more flat”。

× it's a mountain hill city

✓ it's a mountainous city

“mountain hill city”不是自然的英语形容词表达。要表示“多山的城市”，可以用形容词“mountainous”。