Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Yanıtına doğrudan ve doğru zaman yapısıyla başlayın: Çocukluk deneyiminizden söz ederken “I had a bike” deyin. Tekrarları ve düşünme sırasında kullandığınız ifadeleri (“Let me clear my mind…”) çıkarın. Yaşınızı ve bisikleti kimin aldığını net biçimde belirtin; ardından deneyiminizle ilgili kısa, somut bir ayrıntı ekleyin. Cümlenizi tamamlayın.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was about seven, just before I started primary school. I loved riding it around our neighborhood after school.

提案: Görüşünüzü daha doğal bir ifadeyle belirtin: “Bikes aren’t very popular in Turkey.” Ardından karşılaştırmayı “many European countries” şeklinde kurun ve nedenini doğru dilbilgisiyle açıklayın. Örneğin, bisiklet yollarının azlığından veya sürücülerin bisikletlilere yeterince dikkat etmemesinden söz edebilirsiniz. “Traffic rules … is” yerine çoğul özneyle “traffic rules … are” kullanın ve yanıtınızı tamamlanmış bir cümleyle bitirin.

例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in Turkey, especially compared with many European countries. One reason is that there aren’t enough safe bike lanes in many cities. Also, some drivers don’t pay enough attention to cyclists, so people may feel safer using public transport or cars.

× Yeah, I have a bike.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had rather than have for a possession in the past.

× When I was a child, when I was at 7, seven years old, maybe an 8.

✓ When I was a child, maybe seven or eight years old.

Do not use at before an age in this construction. Say was seven years old, or simply say seven or eight years old.

× When I was a child, when I was at 7, seven years old, maybe an 8.

✓ When I was a child, maybe seven or eight years old.

An is not used before a number when stating someone's age with years old. Say eight years old, not an eight.

× I couldn't remember it very well right now.

✓ I can't remember it very well right now.

Right now refers to the present, so use the present form can't rather than the past form couldn't.

× And it was a great experience for.

✓ And it was a great experience for me.

The preposition for needs an object here. Add me to complete the phrase.

× No, I think it's not so popular.

✓ No, I think they are not so popular.

The question is about bikes, a plural noun, so use the plural pronoun they rather than it.

× Uh, it's not as popular as the European countries because, uh, traffic rules in Turkey is not much safer

✓ Bikes are not as popular in Turkey as they are in European countries because traffic rules in Turkey are not as safe as those in European countries.

The original comparison compares bikes with countries. Compare the popularity of bikes in Turkey with their popularity in European countries. The phrase safer also needs a clear comparison; as safe as those in European countries makes the comparison explicit.

× traffic rules in Turkey is not much safer

✓ Traffic rules in Turkey are not much safer.

Traffic rules is plural, so it requires the plural verb are, not is.

× the drivers couldn't much lower careless

✓ the drivers are much less careful

Couldn't expresses inability or possibility, but the student is describing drivers in general. Use are to describe their general behavior. Use less careful, not lower careless.

× the drivers couldn't much lower careless is not care about the the others bicycle riders and.

✓ The drivers are much less careful and do not care about other bicycle riders.

The original clause combines incompatible verb forms and does not form a grammatical sentence. Use are much less careful for the description and do not care for the general action. Remove the extra the and use other before the plural noun bicycle riders.