Bike— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
受験者
When I was a child, I was really interested in riding a bike. Uh, I remember the time when I in summer went to my grandparents and, uh, it was really pleasure for me riding a bike with my friends.
試験官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
受験者
Yeah, sure. I think bikes are really popular in our country nowadays because there are so many traffic jams and sometimes it can be very convenient to use this transfer. So I think so
評価
総合
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
スコア: 55.0提案: Ответьте прямо: у вас был велосипед или нет. Затем добавьте конкретную деталь о том, где или с кем вы катались. Исправьте порядок слов: «I went to my grandparents’ house in the summer». Перед существительным «pleasure» нужен артикль, а после этой конструкции естественнее сказать «it was a pleasure to ride». Избегайте слов-паразитов «uh» и постарайтесь сформулировать ответ короче.
例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my friends when I visited my grandparents in the summer, and it was a lot of fun.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
スコア: 62.0提案: Дайте прямой ответ и подкрепите его одной ясной причиной. Вместо «this transfer» используйте «this means of transport» или просто «a bike». Уберите повтор «So I think so» и замените «Yeah, sure» на более естественное начало, например «Yes, definitely». Для большей конкретики можно упомянуть поездки на работу или короткие расстояния.
例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. They’re a convenient way to get around during rush hour, and they’re also useful for short trips.
文法
× I remember the time when I in summer went to my grandparents
✓ I remember when I went to visit my grandparents in the summer.
The phrase in summer is placed awkwardly between the subject and verb, making the sentence structure unnatural. Put the time expression at the end, and use went to visit my grandparents for a clear, natural construction.
× It was really pleasure for me riding a bike with my friends.
✓ It was really a pleasure for me to ride a bike with my friends.
Pleasure is a singular countable noun in this expression, so it needs the article a. Remember to use an article before a singular countable noun.
× It was really pleasure for me riding a bike with my friends.
✓ It was really a pleasure for me to ride a bike with my friends.
After the expression a pleasure for someone, use an infinitive to describe the enjoyable activity: a pleasure for me to ride. Use this pattern to make the relationship between the activity and the person clear.
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