Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, ‘because’로 이유를 설명한 뒤 ‘so’까지 이어져 문장이 다소 길고 반복적으로 들립니다. 자전거를 무서워했던 구체적인 이유나 당시 상황을 간단히 덧붙이면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 풍부해집니다. 일반적인 자전거를 말할 때는 ‘ride a bike’라고 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I was afraid of falling off. I preferred playing games indoors instead.

提案: ‘Yes’로 의견을 밝힌 점은 좋지만, ‘because’를 반복했고 마지막 문장이 완성되지 않아 답변의 의미가 명확하게 마무리되지 않았습니다. ‘Bikes’가 복수이므로 ‘they’re popular’라고 하고, 자전거가 인기 있는 이유를 완결된 문장으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 이용하기 편리한 점이나 아이들이 친구들과 자전거를 타는 모습을 구체적으로 덧붙일 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially among children. They often ride them with their friends in parks or along riverside paths. It’s a fun way to spend time outdoors.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was scared of riding the bike so I didn't want to have it.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was scared of riding a bike, so I didn't want to have one.

The speaker is referring to riding a bike in general, not to a specific bike previously mentioned, so the indefinite article a is appropriate instead of the. Using one also avoids an unclear reference to it.

× Yes, I think it's very popular in Korea because Because when children hang out with their friends, they want to play more exciting things. So riding a bike

✓ Yes, I think they are very popular in Korea because when children hang out with their friends, they want to do more exciting things, such as riding a bike.

The question asks about bikes, which is plural, so the pronoun should be they rather than it. Make sure that pronouns agree in number with the nouns they refer to.

× Yes, I think it's very popular in Korea because Because when children hang out with their friends, they want to play more exciting things. So riding a bike

✓ Yes, I think they are very popular in Korea because when children hang out with their friends, they want to do more exciting things, such as riding a bike.

Because is repeated, which makes the sentence ungrammatical. Use the conjunction once to introduce the reason, and avoid repeating it when continuing the same sentence.

× So riding a bike

✓ So riding a bike is one of the exciting things they can do together.

The phrase So riding a bike has no main verb, so it is an incomplete sentence. Add a finite verb, such as is, to express a complete thought.