Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and keep the response within a few clear sentences. Use the past tense consistently: say “I had” and “I couldn’t ride it.” The details about the motorcycle are difficult to understand; use the correct name and unit if you mean a 350cc Royal Enfield. Avoid repeating colour descriptions and skip the registration number, which is not relevant to the question.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, although I couldn’t ride it at first. After I finished school, my father gave me a 350cc Royal Enfield. It was red and black, and I was really proud of it.

提案: Give a direct answer, then support it with one or two specific reasons. Use “people who work” rather than “people who are working,” and avoid repeating “helpful” and “useful.” Make the connection between bikes, commuting, and family errands clear. Check subject–verb agreement, for example, “they help” rather than “it helps.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among people who commute to work. They’re affordable and help people avoid traffic, so they can get to the office more quickly. Many parents also use them for short trips, such as picking up their children.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I was a child but I weren't able to drive it.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child, but I weren't able to drive it.

Use the past tense had because the sentence describes having the bike during childhood, a finished period in the past.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I was a child but I weren't able to drive it.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child, but I wasn't able to drive it.

The subject I takes was, not were, in the past negative form. Use I wasn't.

× After completing my school studies my father gifted me a oil and field bike which is three hundred fifty C with a red color tank and black color body and later changed it to black colour full black color it register number was TN fifty five.

✓ After I completed my studies, my father gifted me a Royal Enfield bike with a red tank and a black body. He later changed it to all black. Its registration number was TN 55.

The original sentence runs several ideas together and leaves the subject unclear in the clause about changing the bike's color. Separate the ideas into complete sentences and state who performed the action. The correction also interprets 'oil and field' as the likely bike name, 'Royal Enfield.'

× my father gifted me a oil and field bike

✓ my father gifted me a Royal Enfield bike

Use a before the consonant sound at the start of Royal. The original wording appears to be a misrecognition of the bike name Royal Enfield; if you intended a different name, use an before a word beginning with a vowel sound.

× it register number was TN fifty five.

✓ Its registration number was TN 55.

Use the possessive form its to show that the registration number belongs to the bike. It's means it is and would not fit here.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in the country because people who are working in country and multinational companies were using vehicles regularly because it helps to save the time and reaches the office in accurate timing and also it very helpful to be very useful for our daily life to pick up our child

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in the country because people who work in the country and at multinational companies use vehicles regularly.

The sentence describes a general habit, so use the present simple work and use rather than the past form were using. The present simple is commonly used for habits and general facts.

× people who are working in country and multinational companies were using vehicles regularly because it helps to save the time and reaches the office in accurate timing

✓ People who work in the country and at multinational companies use vehicles regularly because vehicles help them save time and reach work on time.

Vehicles is plural, so use the plural verb help, not helps. Keep the subject and verb consistent: vehicles help and reach. The revised sentence also clarifies that the vehicles help the people reach work.

× people who are working in country and multinational companies

✓ people who work in the country and at multinational companies

Use the before country when referring to the speaker's country in this context. No article is needed before the plural phrase multinational companies.

× and also it very helpful to be very useful for our daily life to pick up our child

✓ Bikes are also very useful in our daily lives, for example, for picking up our children.

The original clause is missing a verb after it. A complete clause needs a verb; here, are links the subject bikes to the description very useful.