Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否有自行车，并注意区分“bike”和“bag”。“which is brought from my mom”语法不自然，可说“my mum bought it for me”；“learned how to ride with it”建议改为“learned how to ride it”。减少重复和停顿，再补充一个具体细节，例如学骑车的地点或感受。

例: Yes, I did. My mum bought me a bike when I was a child, and I learned to ride it in a park near our home. I was a little nervous at first, but I really enjoyed it.

提案: 回答中观点前后有些矛盾：可以说明自行车目前是否普及，以及使用情况是否正在增加。将“write backs”改为“ride bikes”，“get to their works”改为“get to work”；“go to the school”和“the destination they want to”不自然且重复，可删去。用一两个具体场景支持观点，并减少重复和停顿。

例: Bikes are becoming more popular in my country, although they are not the main way people travel everywhere. For example, many people ride them to work or school, especially in areas with safe cycling lanes. They are convenient and also good for the environment.

× I had a bag which is brought from my mom.

✓ I had a bag which was brought from my mom.

这段话描述的是童年时的事情，主句用了过去时 had，因此关系从句也应使用过去时。这里应将 is 改为 was。

× which is brought from my mom

✓ which was brought by my mom

被动语态中，表示动作的执行者通常用 by 引出；from 表示来源，不适合在这里表示“由妈妈带来”。

× the trend of that is getting more popular and more popular

✓ the trend is becoming more and more popular

表示某事物“越来越受欢迎”时，应使用 more and more popular，而不是 more popular and more popular。表达这一趋势时，也可以直接说 the trend is becoming more and more popular。

× when they get to their works

✓ when they get to work

表示“去上班”或“到工作地点”时，work 通常作为不可数名词使用，不加复数词尾 -s。

× when they go to the school

✓ when they go to school

这里泛指去上学这一活动，而不是去某一所特定的学校，因此通常不使用定冠词 the。