Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then add one or two relevant details about the bike or how you used it. Use “patterns” or “design” rather than “textures” if you mean the bike’s appearance. Avoid the unrelated and unclear comment about writing, and reduce repetitions such as “and” and “so.”

例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. It had a few colorful patterns on the frame, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood with my friends. We often rode together after school.

提案: Give a clear answer and explain the trend with one or two well-connected reasons. Avoid repeating “in our country,” and correct “people buy prefer bike” to “people prefer bikes” or “more people are buying bikes.” Since you mention fuel prices, clarify whether you mean motorbikes; “they’re easier to maneuver through traffic” is more natural than “it’s more convenient in traffic.”

例: Yes, motorbikes are quite popular in my country. More people seem to be using them because fuel prices have risen, and they’re often cheaper to run than cars. They’re also easier to maneuver through heavy traffic.

× And I used to like ride it along with my neighborhood friends.

✓ And I used to like riding it along with my neighborhood friends.

After like, use a gerund (-ing form) when describing an activity you enjoy. You can also say, 'I used to like to ride it.'

× So my one of my elders used to help me write.

✓ So one of my elders used to help me write.

The phrase my one of my is incorrectly arranged. Use one of my followed by a plural noun to identify one person from a group.

× So people buy prefer bike more now and as well as it's more convenient in traffic.

✓ So people prefer bikes more now, and they are more convenient in traffic.

The original sentence uses buy and prefer together without a grammatical structure connecting them. Use prefer as the main verb. Also, avoid combining and with as well as in this construction.

× So people buy prefer bike more now and as well as it's more convenient in traffic.

✓ So people prefer bikes more now, and they are more convenient in traffic.

Bike is a countable noun used here to refer to bikes in general, so it should be plural: bikes.