Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Correct the unnatural phrases: say “I’ve always been bad at sports” and “my parents didn’t bother buying me a bike.” Avoid repeating the point about not being interested in sports, and remove fillers such as “you know.” Keep the answer within five sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I never learned to ride one properly. I wasn’t very interested in sports, and my parents probably didn’t want to spend money on a bike I might not use.

提案: Your answer is unfinished, so make sure to complete your main point. Use a more natural phrase such as “my city isn’t pedestrian-friendly” instead of “my country is not a very walkable space.” Explain how traffic and limited cycling infrastructure affect bike use, and avoid repeating “so.”

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in my city. The roads are crowded, and there are very few bike lanes or even proper footpaths. As a result, many people prefer to travel by car or public transport, although cycling could be useful for short trips.

× Also I have been always very bad with sports.

✓ Also, I have always been very bad with sports.

The adverb always normally goes after the auxiliary have and before the past participle been. Place it there to make the verb phrase sound natural.

× Also I have been always very bad with sports.

✓ Also, I have always been very bad at sports.

The standard preposition used with bad to describe skill or ability is at. Use bad at sports rather than bad with sports.

× So my parents did not bother me getting a bike because they are not cheap either.

✓ So my parents did not bother getting me a bike because bikes are not cheap either.

In this sentence, the object me is placed awkwardly between bother and getting. Use bother getting me a bike or bother to get me a bike. The revised sentence also makes clear that bikes, not the parents, are not cheap.

× So usually from seven to like eight o'clock people are busy in the traffic and they stuck for hours so therefore bikes are

✓ So, usually from seven to around eight o'clock, people are stuck in traffic for hours, so bikes are...

The sentence describes a usual situation, so use a present-tense verb phrase. They stuck is not a correct present-tense construction; use they are stuck. The transcript ends mid-sentence, so the final clause is left incomplete.

× So usually from seven to like eight o'clock people are busy in the traffic and they stuck for hours so therefore bikes are

✓ So, usually from seven to around eight o'clock, people are stuck in traffic for hours, so bikes are...

So and therefore express the same result relationship, so using both together is redundant. Use either so or therefore, not both.