Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then describe how you used the bike. Replace unnatural phrases such as “had that privilege” and “have a ride” with “I was lucky enough to have a bike” and “ride my bike.” The final comment, “I really did a great job,” is unclear; explain what you enjoyed or learned instead.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I rode it almost every weekend. I sometimes fell off, but I wasn’t seriously hurt. I especially enjoyed riding around with my friends and cousins.

提案: Give a clear yes-or-no opinion at the beginning and support it with a specific reason or example. Your answer is difficult to follow because it contrasts generations without explaining the change, and “while driving” is not the right phrase for riding a bike. Avoid ending with “but no, not today” after suggesting that cycling is a great experience.

例: Yes, bikes are still popular in my country, especially among children and people who use them for short trips. However, fewer teenagers ride for fun than when I was young, because many now prefer spending their free time on their phones or using public transport.

× I would say today's generation is kind of different when I was a child which was fifteen years ago

✓ I would say today's generation is kind of different from the generation I grew up in fifteen years ago.

The adjective different needs a clear comparison, usually introduced with from. The original sentence compares today's generation directly with the time when the student was a child. Compare the generation now with the generation then: different from the generation I grew up in.

× it's really great experience to have a communication with your friends while driving

✓ It's a really great experience to communicate with your friends while riding bikes.

The singular countable noun experience needs the article a. Also, communication is usually uncountable in this meaning, so communicate is more appropriate than have a communication. Use riding bikes rather than driving when referring to bikes.