Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答过去是否有自行车，然后用一到两个具体原因或补充信息展开。注意过去时：用“didn’t have”和“didn’t know”；表达“骑自行车”应使用“ride a bike”，不是“wear/wire/rear a bike”。避免重复“I”，并将答案控制在五句话以内。

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I hadn’t learned how to ride one. I’m learning now, though, and I’d like to buy a bike so I can go riding with my friends.

提案: 删去“This is a good question”这类与回答无关的开场语，先明确说明自行车是否受欢迎。接着用具体例子解释原因，例如香港有共享单车服务，人们觉得方便。注意说“in Hong Kong”，而不是“in the Hong Kong”；“bike”是自行车，“bike-sharing services”是共享单车服务。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Hong Kong, especially for short trips. There are several bike-sharing services, and people use them because they’re convenient and easy to rent.

× I don't have a bike before I'm child because when I'm child I don't know how to wear a bike, I don't have these skills

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to wear a bike and didn't have these skills.

这里描述的是童年时的情况，应使用一般过去时：don't have 改为 didn't have，I'm 改为 I was，don't know 改为 didn't know。回答过去的问题时，应保持时态与过去时间一致。

× I'm child

✓ I was a child

child 是可数名词单数，前面需要加不定冠词 a。过去的语境中还应使用 was。可以记住：表示“我是一个孩子”时说 a child。

× now I I learning

✓ now I am learning

现在进行时的结构是“主语 + am/is/are + 动词-ing”。这里缺少 be 动词 am，而且 I 重复了一次。可检查现在进行时句子中是否包含 be 动词。

× learning how to wire bike

✓ learning how to wire a bike

bike 是可数名词单数，前面需要加冠词 a。请注意，冠词错误之外，wire 的用词可能不符合原意；此处仅按要求修正冠词。

× I don't have these skills but now I I learning how to wire bike and I want to buy a bike now because I can rear bike with my friend.

✓ I don't have these skills, but now I am learning how to wire a bike, and I want to buy a bike because I can rear bike with my friend.

原句用多个意思完整的分句连续连接，缺少适当的标点，读起来像逗号拼接句。可在转折连词 but 前加逗号，并用标点清楚分隔较长的并列分句。

× Now I can see in the Hong Kong have many buy such as local buy and halo buy because they're very convenient.

✓ Now I can see that in Hong Kong there are many buy, such as local buy and halo buy, because they're very convenient.

表示某地“有……”时，可以使用 there be 句型。many 后接复数名词时应使用 there are。原句的 buy 用词可能有误，但此处只修正符合指定语法类型的问题。