Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答过去是否有自行车，并使用过去时，例如“ I had”。“four wheelchair”表达不清；如果你指的是带辅助轮的儿童自行车，可以说“a bike with training wheels”。“two wheel”应为“two wheels”，而且“make me safe not to feel down”不自然，可改为说明辅助轮如何帮助你保持平衡。结尾信息重复，建议删去。

例: Yes, I did. I had a small bike with training wheels when I was a child. They helped me keep my balance, so I felt more confident when I was learning to ride.

提案: 回答方向明确，但“bike”泛指自行车时通常用复数“bikes”；“depends on about”应改为“depends on the city”。避免重复“I think”，并把最后一句补完整，具体说明南京居民是否常骑车及原因。可用“while”对比两个城市，并加入一个具体细节。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, although it varies from city to city. In Shanghai, many people cycle around the streets, especially for short trips. In Nanjing, where I live, people also use bikes, but shared bikes are particularly convenient for getting to the metro.

× Yes of course I do have a bike when I was a child, but a four wheelchair once which has two wheel to make me safe not to feel down.

✓ Yes, of course. I had a bike when I was a child, but I also once had a four-wheeled bike with two extra wheels to help keep me from falling.

这段话描述的是童年经历，应使用一般过去时。原句中的“do have”是现在时表达，应改为“had”；后文描述过去拥有的东西，也应使用“had”，而不是现在时“has”。

× Yes of course I do have a bike when I was a child, but a four wheelchair once which has two wheel to make me safe not to feel down.

✓ Yes, of course. I had a bike when I was a child, but I also once had a four-wheeled bike with two extra wheels to help keep me from falling.

“two”后面应接可数名词复数，因此“two wheel”应改为“two wheels”。此外，“four-wheeled”作名词前的复合形容词时需要使用连字符和过去分词形式。

× I think so. I think bike is really popular in my country, but it depends on about the city.

✓ I think so. I think bikes are really popular in my country, but it depends on the city.

这里泛指自行车这一类事物，应使用复数“bikes”，并与复数动词“are”搭配。

× I think so. I think bike is really popular in my country, but it depends on about the city.

✓ I think so. I think bikes are really popular in my country, but it depends on the city.

“depend on”中的“on”已经是正确的介词，不能再加“about”。应删去“about”，说“depends on the city”。

× Like in Shanghai people usually ride a bike on the streets really chill, but in Nanjing, the city I live, people usually.

✓ For example, in Shanghai, people usually ride bikes on the streets in a relaxed way, but in Nanjing, the city where I live, people usually ride bikes differently.

表达“我居住的城市”时，需要使用关系副词“where”，或说“the city that I live in”。原句“the city I live”缺少介词“in”。

× Like in Shanghai people usually ride a bike on the streets really chill, but in Nanjing, the city I live, people usually.

✓ For example, in Shanghai, people usually ride bikes on the streets in a relaxed way, but in Nanjing, the city where I live, people usually ride bikes differently.

“chill”是形容词，不能直接修饰动词“ride”。可以改用副词“chillly”，但更自然的表达是“in a relaxed way”，即“以轻松的方式”。

× Like in Shanghai people usually ride a bike on the streets really chill, but in Nanjing, the city I live, people usually.

✓ For example, in Shanghai, people usually ride bikes on the streets in a relaxed way, but in Nanjing, the city where I live, people usually ride bikes differently.

“people usually”后面没有谓语动词或其他必要成分，句子没有表达完整意思。需要补充人们通常做什么，例如“people usually ride bikes differently”。