Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你直接回答了问题，也提供了学习骑车的经历，但整句话过长，多个信息用 and 连在一起，影响流畅度。建议拆成两到三句，并使用更自然的表达：用“taught me how to ride”代替“started to tell me how to ride”，用“practised riding”代替“practiced it”；“I feel proud”应改为过去时“I felt proud”，而“brought it”应改为“rode it”。描述公园时可以说“a park near our home”。

例: Yes, I did. My father taught me how to ride when I was about five or six, and we often practised in a park near our home. I felt really proud when I managed to ride on my own for the first time.

提案: 你有回答问题，也提到了自行车价格较低这一原因，但表达中存在单复数和逻辑问题。“bike”泛指时应使用复数“bikes”；“lower classes”容易显得不尊重，也没有必要，可以改为“people on lower incomes”。“They just can't ride their bike”与前文意思矛盾，应表达为“they can ride bikes to work”。建议删去重复的“中国”以及口语填充语“you know it”，并补充一个具体场景或自行车的其他用途。

例: Yes, bikes are still quite popular in China, especially in smaller cities. Many people choose them because they are much cheaper than cars and are convenient for short trips. For example, people often cycle to work or to nearby shops.

× We often practiced it near our home and it was a park.

✓ We often practiced riding it at a park near our home.

表达“练习做某事”时，practice 后面通常接动名词（-ing 形式），所以应说 practiced riding it。原句中的 it 指代不清，改成 at a park near our home 后，地点关系也更明确。

× I feel proud when I first brought it without help.

✓ I felt proud when I first brought it without help.

这句话讲的是童年时第一次独自骑车的经历，属于过去的事情，因此主句动词 feel 应使用过去式 felt，与 when 引导的过去时间语境保持一致。

× Yes, bike is so popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are so popular in my country.

这里是在泛指自行车这一类事物。可数名词 bike 泛指时通常用复数 bikes；相应地，谓语动词也应使用 are。