Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then use a clear linking phrase to explain how the bike felt and what you did with it. Avoid repeating “and it was.” Also, use “pedaled” or “rode” for cycling; “peddled” usually means selling goods.

例: Yes, I did. My dad gave me a silver bike, and because it was lightweight and easy to handle, I often rode it around our neighborhood.

提案: Give a direct answer and make the reason more precise. Use “they” to refer to bikes, and use the present tense “can’t afford” if you are describing people’s situation today. You can also avoid repeating the idea that people use bikes for transportation.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in the Philippines, especially in busy towns and cities. They’re relatively affordable, and many people use them for short commutes because owning a car can be expensive.

× It was a silver bike that my dad gave me and it was lightweight and it was easy to handle that I peddled it around our neighborhood.

✓ It was a silver bike that my dad gave me, and it was lightweight and easy to handle, so I peddled it around our neighborhood.

That does not correctly connect easy to handle with the result that follows. Use so to show that the bike was easy to handle and, as a result, you rode it around the neighborhood. A comma before so also helps separate the connected clauses.

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country, the Philippines because it's affordable and people use it as a means of transportation.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country, the Philippines, because they are affordable and people use them as a means of transportation.

The subject bikes is plural, so the pronouns referring to bikes should also be plural: they and them. Use they are affordable and people use them to maintain agreement between the nouns and pronouns.

× A lot of people couldn't afford cars so that's what they often use.

✓ A lot of people can't afford cars, so that's what they often use.

This sentence describes a general situation in the present, as shown by often use. Use the present-tense form can't rather than the past-tense form couldn't to keep the tenses consistent.