Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提供了年龄和买车的人作为细节。注意讲过去的经历时要统一使用过去时：将“have”改为“had”，“It is”改为“It was”。“bought a bike to me”应改为“bought me a bike”或“bought a bike for me”。“when I was young”和“when I was eight years old”信息有些重复，可删去一个，并补充一个具体细节，例如自行车的颜色或你如何使用它。

例: Yes, I did. When I was eight, my dad bought me my first bike. It was red, and I used to ride it around our neighbourhood after school. I was really excited to learn how to ride it.

提案: 先直接回答自行车在你们国家是否流行，再用清楚、相关的理由或例子支持观点。目前回答在句末中断，且“I remember when I was when I went to”重复；“the Shanghai”应为“Shanghai”，“buy bike”应为“buy bikes”或“ride bikes”。“Shanghai is an international School”与问题的关联不清，建议说明在上海看到的骑行现象，例如通勤、共享单车或交通便利，并完整结束句子。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities like Shanghai. Many people ride them to work or use shared bikes for short trips. They are convenient and can help people avoid traffic.

× Yes, when I was young, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I had a bike.

这句话描述的是小时候的经历，时间在过去，因此应使用一般过去时 have 的过去式 had。讲述过去发生的事情时，要注意保持时态一致。

× I remember when I was eight years old, my daddy bought a bike to me.

✓ I remember when I was eight years old, my daddy bought a bike for me.

表示“为某人买某物”时，通常使用 buy something for someone，而不是 buy something to someone。

× It is my first bike.

✓ It was my first bike.

这里是在回忆小时候的自行车，应使用过去时 was，而不是现在时 is。

× I love it so much.

✓ I loved it so much.

结合上下文，这句话描述的是小时候对那辆自行车的感受，因此应使用一般过去时 loved。若想表达现在仍然喜欢它，则可以保留 love。

× Yes, it's very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country.

问题问的是复数 bikes，因此应使用复数代词 they，并搭配 are。避免用单数代词 it 指代复数名词。

× I remember when I was when I went to the Shanghai.

✓ I remember when I went to Shanghai.

句中重复使用了 when，并且“I was”后没有接完整内容，导致结构不清。保留“I remember when I went to...”即可表达“我记得我去……的时候”。

× I remember when I was when I went to the Shanghai.

✓ I remember when I went to Shanghai.

Shanghai 是城市名称，通常直接使用，不加定冠词 the。地名通常不加 the，除非该名称本身有特殊用法。

× I saw many people buy bike every day and I think it's their

✓ I saw many people buy bikes every day, and I think it's their...

bike 是可数名词，泛指人们日常购买的自行车时，应用复数 bikes，或使用 a bike。原句最后的“it's their”不完整；由于转录内容被截断，无法确定后续内容，因此不补写。