Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You answer the question directly and give a personal memory, which is relevant. Improve fluency by avoiding repeated words and fillers such as “my, my” and “uh.” The phrase “Jimmy, didn't this memory, uh, come in?” is unclear and should be removed. Use natural phrasing such as “when I was little,” and add one specific detail about learning to ride.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a pretty red bike when I was little, and he taught me how to ride it. I remember feeling excited when I managed to ride it on my own.

提案: You give a clear opinion, but the explanation is difficult to follow because of errors such as “I think by very popular” and the repeated phrase “people commute to people go.” Use “bikes are very popular” and describe who uses them and for what purposes. Add a linking phrase such as “For example” to make your supporting detail clearer.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them to commute to work or school, while others ride them to nearby shops. For example, it’s common to see students cycling around my neighborhood in the morning.

× Yes, I think by very popular in my country because I can see people commute to people go to school or they go around by using bike

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because I see people commuting to school or traveling around by bike.

The clause I think by very popular is missing a subject and the present-tense verb are. The phrase people commute to people go to school is also incorrectly structured and repeats the idea of commuting. Use a clear clause such as people commuting to school. When describing a general activity, the -ing form can follow see, as in I see people commuting.

× Yes, I think by very popular in my country because I can see people commute to people go to school or they go around by using bike

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because I see people commuting to school or traveling around by bike.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so using it with using requires an article: using a bike. In this sentence, however, the natural expression is by bike, which does not take an article. Use by bike when describing a mode of transportation.