Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then add one clear detail. The response ends mid-sentence, and “my school is near to school” is repetitive and unclear; say “my school was nearby.” Clarify how the landlord’s son helped you learn to ride, and use the past tense consistently when talking about childhood.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I usually walked to school because it was nearby. However, I learned to ride a bike when my landlord’s son let me practise on his.

提案: Give your opinion directly without the awkward opener “As I think”; use “I think” or “Yes, they are.” Correct the agreement and pronoun choices: bikes are “affordable,” and “most people can afford one.” Add a specific reason or example, and finish the sentence clearly.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re relatively affordable and easy to learn to ride, so many people use them for short trips. In busy areas, they can also be a convenient way to avoid traffic.

× I used to walk to school because my school is near to school.

✓ I used to walk to school because my school was close to my house.

The phrase near to school does not express the intended location clearly. Use close to my house to describe the school’s location. Because the sentence describes the student’s childhood, was is also appropriate for the past time frame.

× I used to walk to school because my school is near to school.

✓ I used to walk to school because my school was close to my house.

The answer describes a situation during childhood, so the past-tense verb was fits the time frame better than is.

× I know how to ride a bike because my house owner son parked the bike in front of my

✓ I know how to ride a bike because my house owner son parked the bike in front of my house.

The sentence ends with my, leaving the location incomplete. Add the noun house to complete the phrase in front of my house.

× As I think bikes are popular in our country because it is not so expensive and it is easy to learn and almost everybody can afford

✓ I think bikes are popular in our country because they are not very expensive, they are easy to learn to ride, and almost everybody can afford them.

As I think is not the natural way to introduce an opinion here. Use I think. The revised sentence also makes the reason clauses connect clearly.

× As I think bikes are popular in our country because it is not so expensive and it is easy to learn and almost everybody can afford

✓ I think bikes are popular in our country because they are not very expensive, they are easy to learn to ride, and almost everybody can afford them.

Bikes is plural, so use the plural pronoun they rather than it. The verb afford also needs an object in this sentence, so use them to refer back to bikes.