Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng cần dùng thì quá khứ vì câu hỏi hỏi về thời thơ ấu: nói “I had a bike”, không phải “I will have a bike”. Sửa cấu trúc “my mother was bought for me” thành “my mother bought one for me”, và thêm mạo từ trong “when I was a child”. Có thể phát triển câu trả lời bằng một chi tiết cụ thể, chẳng hạn bạn thường đạp xe ở đâu hoặc cảm thấy thế nào.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was about seven, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood.

提案: Bạn đã nêu ý rằng xe đạp phổ biến, nhưng các ý sau chưa rõ nghĩa. Dùng “children” thay cho “every children” (hoặc “every child”), và diễn đạt mục đích là “ride bikes to school” và “for exercise”. Tránh “the order by”; hãy nêu rõ ai sử dụng xe đạp và vì sao. Câu hỏi dùng thì hiện tại, nên dùng “has” hoặc “owns” thay vì “had”.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children ride them to school, while adults often use them for exercise or short trips. They are convenient and relatively inexpensive, so many families own at least one.

× Yes, I will have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about your childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had instead of will have, which refers to the future.

× When I was child

✓ When I was a child

Child is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before child.

× my mother was bought for me

✓ my mother bought it for me

The mother performed the action of buying, so use the active voice: subject + past-tense verb + object. Was bought incorrectly makes the sentence passive.

× and I like it

✓ and I liked it

This part describes how you felt about the bike during your childhood, so use the past-tense verb liked.

× every children buy to the school

✓ Every child rides a bike to school

Every is followed by a singular noun, so use child rather than children. Use rides a bike to express traveling to school by bike.

× by to exercise

✓ for exercise

Use for before exercise to describe the purpose of riding a bike. By to is not a correct prepositional phrase here.

× Every family had bike.

✓ Every family has a bike.

The answer describes a general situation in the present, so use has rather than the past-tense had.

× Every family had bike.

✓ Every family has a bike.

Bike is a singular countable noun and needs an article. Use a before bike.