Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 맞춰 어린 시절에 자전거가 있었는지 먼저 명확하게 답하세요. “I have a big nail chart”와 “playing the PLA playground”는 의미가 불분명하므로, 전달하려는 내용을 확인해 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸는 것이 좋습니다. 예를 들어 자전거를 탔던 기억이나 야외 활동을 한 가지 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. “enjoy to ride”가 아니라 “enjoy riding”이라고 말하고, 반복되는 단어와 불필요한 머뭇거림을 줄이세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around the playground near my home, especially on weekends. It was a fun way to spend time outdoors.

提案: “자전거가 인기 있는지”에 대해 먼저 분명히 답하고, 이유를 완전한 문장으로 설명하세요. “people want to prefer to walking” 대신 “people prefer walking”이라고 표현할 수 있습니다. 답변 끝의 “there's no”는 문장이 완성되지 않았으므로 무엇이 부족한지 구체적으로 말하거나 삭제하세요. 한 가지 이유와 간단한 예를 연결어 “because”나 “for example”로 덧붙이면 답변이 더 논리적입니다.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people prefer walking, especially for short journeys. Also, cycling may be less convenient in places without safe bike lanes.

× Yes, I have a big nail chart.

✓ Yes, I had a big nail chart.

The examiner asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Change have to had. The phrase big nail chart is unclear, so it has not been changed.

× So yeah, I used to enjoy to write write on riding a bike.

✓ So yeah, I used to enjoy riding a bike.

Enjoy is followed by a gerund, or verb + -ing, not an infinitive with to. Use enjoy riding. The repeated words appear to be speech disfluencies and have been omitted.

× I don't I don't think bikes are popular in my country because I used to see most of like also people want to prefer to walking and and also.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because I see that most people prefer walking.

The student is describing people's current habits, so the present tense see is more appropriate than used to see, which describes a past habit that no longer applies. Prefer walking is a grammatical structure; remove want to, which is redundant here. Repeated words and fillers have been omitted.

× As in my country, there's no.

✓ This sentence is incomplete, so its intended meaning cannot be corrected reliably.

The clause ends after no and does not provide the thing that is unavailable or absent. Complete the thought, for example, by naming what there is not in the country. Since the intended meaning is unclear, no specific completion can be supplied.