Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayın; “But I was a child” ifadesi burada gerekli değil. Tekrarları ve kendinizi düzeltirken oluşan uzun duraksamaları azaltın. Geçmişteki bir deneyimi anlatırken fiilleri geçmiş zamanda kullanın (“went”, “rode”, “was”). Bisikletinizin rengini hatırlıyorsanız bu bilgiyi tamamlanmış bir cümleyle ekleyin. Yanıtı 2–3 net cümlede tutun.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it to the park with my friends, and we had a lot of fun. My bike was red.

提案: Önce soruya net bir yanıt verin; örneğin bisikletlerin ülkenizde çok popüler olup olmadığını belirtin. “There isn’t sufficient area” ifadesi yerine, bisiklet yollarının azlığını veya yoğun trafiği daha açık biçimde anlatın. Hollanda’yı örnek verirken karşılaştırma bağlacı kullanın (“whereas”, “for example”) ve cümleyi tamamlayın. Anlaşılmayan veya yarım kalan bölümleri çıkartıp 2–3 bağlantılı cümle kurun.

例: Bikes are not very popular in my country, mainly because there aren’t enough dedicated bike lanes in many cities. As a result, people often choose cars or public transport. In the Netherlands, by contrast, cycling is common because the cities have excellent infrastructure for cyclists.

× But I was a child, I I had a bicycle

✓ When I was a child, I had a bicycle

The opening clause does not connect grammatically to the main clause. Use when to introduce the time period in which the event happened, and remove the repeated subject.

× we went to the park by a bike

✓ we went to the park by bike

The idiomatic expression for traveling by bicycle is by bike, without the article a. You can also say we rode our bikes to the park.

× while we are we was riding ride a bike

✓ while we were riding our bikes

The story describes a past experience, so use the past form were rather than the present form are. Use were riding to describe an activity that was in progress in the past.

× we was riding

✓ we were riding

The subject we takes were, not was. Make sure the verb agrees with its subject, even when using a past continuous verb form.

× we was riding ride a bike

✓ we were riding our bikes

After were in the past continuous form, use the verb ending in -ing. Do not add the base form ride after riding.

× My my bike, my bike's color is was

✓ My bike's color was [color]

The speaker is describing a childhood bike, so use the past-tense verb was, not the present-tense verb is. Add the color after was to complete the thought.

× Especially in my country we don't have sufficient area to ride a bike people but developed countries such as Holland, Netherlands, their transportation, I couldn't okay.

✓ In my country, there isn't enough space for people to ride bikes, unlike in developed countries such as the Netherlands, where bicycles are a common means of transportation.

The original response combines incomplete and disconnected phrases, and the word order in to ride a bike people is incorrect. Use a complete clause such as there isn't enough space for people to ride bikes, then connect the comparison with unlike and form a complete clause after where.