Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the childhood question directly and clarify whether you mean a bicycle or a motorbike, since the age and driving-licence details suggest a motorbike. Use past tense consistently (for example, “I had to wait until I was 18”) and avoid repeating yourself or using fillers. Add one specific detail about what you used instead as a child.

例: No, I didn’t have a motorbike as a child because I was too young to ride one legally. I had to wait until I turned 18 and got my licence. When I was younger, I usually walked or travelled with my parents.

提案: Give a clear opening answer, then support it with two concise reasons. Use natural expressions such as “two-wheelers,” “cars,” “more affordable to run,” and “narrow streets.” Avoid “people always afford,” which does not express your intended meaning, and reduce fillers and repetition.

例: Yes, two-wheelers are very popular in my country. They’re more affordable to buy and run than cars, and they’re easier to ride through narrow, crowded streets. For these reasons, many people prefer them for their daily commute.

× No, I didn't have my bike as I was not 18 year old.

✓ No, I didn't have my bike because I was not 18 years old.

The expression for someone's age uses years in the plural when the number is greater than one. Use 18 years old, not 18 year old.

× So my parents told me to have a bike when you are 18 plus and you can ride your bike legally with your driving license.

✓ So my parents told me to get a bike when I was 18 or older and could legally ride it with my driving license.

The sentence reports what the parents told the student, so you and your refer to the wrong person. Use I and it to refer to the student and the bike.

× So my parents told me to have a bike when you are 18 plus and you can ride your bike legally with your driving license.

✓ So my parents told me to get a bike when I was 18 or older and could legally ride it with my driving license.

The sentence reports what the parents said rather than quoting their exact words. In reported speech, the present-tense verbs are generally shifted back to the past: are becomes was, and can becomes could.

× So I stayed and I I was waiting uh to get 18 year old.

✓ So I stayed and waited to turn 18.

Get 18 year old is not a grammatical way to describe reaching that age. Use turn 18. Also, removing the repeated I makes the sentence structure clearer.

× So after that I commute.

✓ So after that I commuted.

The answer describes events from the past, so the verb should also be in the past tense. The past tense of commute is commuted.

× Yes uh two Wheelers are very popular in my country as most of the people cannot afford four Wheeler or cars and also two Wheelers are very cheaper to run and they can pass in a very narrow passage as uh cars could not.

✓ Yes, two-wheelers are very popular in my country because most people cannot afford four-wheelers or cars. Also, two-wheelers are very cheap to run, and they can pass through very narrow passages, unlike cars.

When referring to vehicles as a category, use the plural forms two-wheelers and four-wheelers. The singular four-wheeler does not agree with the general plural meaning in this sentence.

× Yes uh two Wheelers are very popular in my country as most of the people cannot afford four Wheeler or cars and also two Wheelers are very cheaper to run and they can pass in a very narrow passage as uh cars could not.

✓ Yes, two-wheelers are very popular in my country because most people cannot afford four-wheelers or cars. Also, two-wheelers are very cheap to run, and they can pass through very narrow passages, unlike cars.

Very cannot modify the comparative form cheaper. Use very cheap, or use much cheaper if you want to make a comparison.

× Yes uh two Wheelers are very popular in my country as most of the people cannot afford four Wheeler or cars and also two Wheelers are very cheaper to run and they can pass in a very narrow passage as uh cars could not.

✓ Yes, two-wheelers are very popular in my country because most people cannot afford four-wheelers or cars. Also, two-wheelers are very cheap to run, and they can pass through very narrow passages, unlike cars.

Vehicles pass through a passage, not in a passage. Use through to describe movement from one side of a narrow space to the other.