Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes a personal detail, but “in my younger cousin’s hand” sounds unnatural. Say that your cousin “has it now,” and use a full stop or a linking word to connect the ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child. My younger cousin has it now, and she still uses it.

提案: You give a relevant comparison between the past and the present, but the answer is repetitive and contains grammar errors. Avoid repeating “my city,” say “in the past,” and use “people still use them.” Break the long sentence into shorter, clearer points.

例: Yes, bikes are still popular, especially in my city, which has a long history of cycling. However, fewer people use them now than in the past because many prefer cars or public transport.

× Now the bike is in my younger cousin's hand, she is using it.

✓ Now the bike is in my younger cousin's hands, and she is using it.

The idiomatic expression is in someone's hands, using the plural noun hands. Also, the original joins two independent clauses with only a comma; use and to connect them correctly.

× Yes, they are very popular, especially in my city since my city is known for people using bikes back in days and now some people still using them but not too much like before.

✓ Yes, they are very popular, especially in my city, which is known for people using bikes back in the day. Some people still use them now, but not as much as before.

In the expression back in the day, the singular noun day requires the definite article the. Use back in the day to refer to a past period.

× Yes, they are very popular, especially in my city since my city is known for people using bikes back in days and now some people still using them but not too much like before.

✓ Yes, they are very popular, especially in my city, which is known for people using bikes back in the day. Some people still use them now, but not as much as before.

The clause some people still using them is missing a finite verb. In the simple present, say some people still use them. Splitting the long sentence also makes the ideas clearer.