Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one or two clear details about the bike or how you used it. Use the past tense for childhood memories: say “when I was young” and “it was pink.” Avoid repeating the same idea, and correct “I’m just can’t remember” to “I can’t forget.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a pink one, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood. I still remember it fondly, although my mother eventually gave it to another child.

提案: Give a clear yes-or-no response and explain one specific reason. Use natural phrases such as “when people are in a hurry” and “ride a bike.” Avoid unclear or repeated phrases like “necessary things necessary vehicles,” and use linking words to connect your reason to your answer.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. People often ride them for short trips because they are convenient and can help them avoid traffic. They are also cheaper to use than cars.

× My parents bought me a bike in my young age.

✓ My parents bought me a bike at a young age.

Use at a young age, not in my young age. The preposition at is used in this expression.

× I'm just can't remember I can't forget about it.

✓ I just can't forget about it.

Can't already contains the auxiliary verb can, so it cannot be used with am. Say I can't, not I'm can't. The original also repeats the same idea, so the correction keeps the clear meaning without the unnecessary repetition.

× My mom gave to other child.

✓ My mom gave it to another child.

The verb gave needs an object pronoun here to identify what was given. Use it to refer to the bike.

× My mom gave to other child.

✓ My mom gave it to another child.

Child is a singular countable noun and needs a determiner. Another is appropriate when referring to one different child.

× In most of the situation

✓ In most situations

Most refers to multiple situations, so use the plural noun situations. The phrase most situations is also more natural here.

× When we are hurry

✓ When we are in a hurry

The expression is be in a hurry. The preposition in is needed before a hurry.

× We can go with bikes not only with car or bus.

✓ We can travel by bike rather than by car or bus.

Use by to describe the means of transportation. By bike, by car, and by bus are the standard expressions.

× We can go with bikes not only with car or bus.

✓ We can travel by bike rather than by car or bus.

Car and bus are singular countable nouns and need articles. The expressions by car and by bus use the article the.

× In mine country

✓ In my country

Mine is a possessive pronoun and does not come directly before a noun. Use the possessive adjective my before country.

× Yeah, bikes are popular in my country because in most of the situation when we are hurry or something we can go with bikes not only with car or bus yeah in mine country bagges and necessary things necessary vehicles.

✓ Yeah, bikes are popular in my country because we can travel by bike when we are in a hurry. They are also useful for carrying bags and other necessary items.

The final part of the original is an incomplete and unclear sequence of phrases, without a clear grammatical connection to the rest of the sentence. Use complete clauses with a subject and a verb, and connect related ideas clearly.