Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Em nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng thì quá khứ: “Yes, I did.” Có vẻ “pink pie” là “pink bike”, nhưng cần dùng từ chính xác và tránh lặp lại cụm này. Sửa các lỗi ngữ pháp như “on my fifth birthday”, “spent a week learning to ride it” và “I used it every day”. Nên chia ý thành 2–3 câu rõ ràng, có thể thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về nơi em thường đạp xe.

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a pink bike for my fifth birthday. It took me about a week to learn how to ride it, and after that I used it every day to cycle around my neighborhood.

提案: Em nên mở đầu rõ ràng bằng “Yes, I think they are” rồi nêu khu vực hoặc nhóm người sử dụng xe đạp. Một số cụm trong câu chưa rõ nghĩa, chẳng hạn “power fields”, “Roman area” và “early Italy's people”; hãy kiểm tra lại từ định dùng, có thể là “from my perspective”, “rural areas” và “elderly people”. Sửa “as a example” thành “as an example” và dùng “people use”. Thêm từ nối như “For example” và giữ câu trả lời gọn, tối đa 5 câu.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially in rural areas. For example, in my hometown, many students cycle to school, while some elderly people use bikes to get around their neighborhoods. They are affordable and convenient, particularly for short trips.

× Yes of course I have a pink pie.

✓ Yes, of course, I had a pink pie.

The question asks about your childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had rather than have to describe something you owned as a child.

× A pink pie back when I was a child which I have received from my parents when in my 5th birthdays

✓ I had a pink pie when I was a child, and I received it from my parents on my fifth birthday.

The original is a sentence fragment because it has no main verb or complete clause. Make it a complete sentence with a subject and a verb. The corrected version also uses the simple past to match the childhood time frame.

× A pink pie back when I was a child which I have received from my parents when in my 5th birthdays

✓ I had a pink pie when I was a child, and I received it from my parents on my fifth birthday.

Use on with a specific birthday: on my birthday. When is not the appropriate preposition in this phrase.

× A pink pie back when I was a child which I have received from my parents when in my 5th birthdays

✓ I had a pink pie when I was a child, and I received it from my parents on my fifth birthday.

The phrase refers to one birthday, so birthday should be singular, not birthdays. Use my fifth birthday.

× I spent a week for try and learn to by its dance

✓ I spent a week trying to learn to ride it.

After spend time, use a verb in the -ing form. Say spent a week trying, not spent a week for try. The phrase learn to ride it also uses the infinitive correctly after learn.

× I used everyday to drive around.

✓ I used it every day to drive around.

Everyday is an adjective, as in everyday activities. To describe how often you did something, use the two-word adverbial phrase every day.

× From my power fields is usually popular in the Roman area.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are usually popular in the Roman area.

The original has no clear subject for is and does not form a complete, clear clause. Include the subject bikes and use a complete introductory phrase such as In my opinion.

× early Italy's people uses to go around in the neighborhoods because it's cheap and convenient.

✓ People use it to get around the neighborhoods because it is cheap and convenient.

People is plural, so it takes use, not uses. Make sure the verb agrees with its subject: plural subject, plural verb form.

× Like uh, take my hometown as a example.

✓ For example, take my hometown.

The original uses a before example, which begins with a vowel sound; the correct article would be an. The revised sentence also uses the more natural introductory phrase For example.