Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly at the beginning, then explain how your father’s bike was used. Avoid restarting the sentence and correct the tense: use “had” for the past and “didn’t have” for yourself. Add one specific detail, such as where he took you.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. My dad had one, though, and he often took me to nearby places on it.

提案: Give a clear opinion without claiming that bikes are the most popular in the world unless you can support that comparison. Reduce fillers and repetition, and add a specific reason why people use bikes in Pakistan.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan, especially in busy cities. Many people use them because they’re more affordable than cars and easier to get through traffic.

× Well, I'm my dad had one

✓ Well, my dad had one

I'm is an incomplete and misplaced start that makes the sentence structure ungrammatical. Remove it and begin with the subject, my dad.

× he used to take me to places where we go

✓ he used to take me to places where we went

The sentence describes childhood in the past, so go should be changed to its past-tense form, went.

× So yeah, my dad has. I'm sorry, my dad had, but I didn't have.

✓ So yeah, my dad had one, but I didn't have one.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so use the past-tense form had rather than has. Include one after had and didn't have to make clear what the student and the student's dad had.

× So umm bikes are so much popular in Pakistan.

✓ So, bikes are very popular in Pakistan.

Much does not modify the adjective popular in this construction. Use very popular or so popular instead.