Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in the past tense because you are talking about your childhood: say “I had” and “I rode.” Use the natural phrase “a green children’s bike” or “a green bike for children.” You already include a relevant detail about your mother and riding to school, so connect those ideas clearly and avoid fillers such as “umm.”

例: Yes, I had a small green bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me, and because she was often busy with work, I rode it to school by myself.

提案: Give a clear response to the question first, such as “Yes, they’re quite popular, especially in cities.” The phrase “to some degree the worst” is unclear, and “advanced tour vehicle” does not express your meaning; use “a public bike-sharing scheme” instead. Correct “it could be rent” to “they can be rented,” and explain briefly how this encourages people to use fewer cars.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in big cities. Many places have public bike-sharing schemes, and the bikes can often be rented for a low fee or even used for free. They’re convenient for short journeys and help reduce car use and greenhouse-gas emissions.

× I have a bike ... in my childhood

✓ I had a bike in my childhood.

The question asks about your childhood, a finished period in the past, so use the past-tense form had rather than have.

× in my childhood

✓ during my childhood

During is more natural when referring to something that happened throughout a period of life. You can also say when I was a child.

× a green a children bike

✓ a green children's bike

Use one article, a, before the adjective and noun phrase. Children's is the possessive form used to describe a bike intended for or belonging to a child.

× ride to the school

✓ ride to school

When school refers to its usual function as a place of education, it generally does not take the definite article. Say ride to school.

× there is a advanced ... vehicle

✓ there is an advanced ... vehicle

Use an before a word that begins with a vowel sound. Advanced begins with a vowel sound, so the correct phrase is an advanced vehicle.

× it could be rent for free

✓ it could be rented for free

The sentence uses a passive construction after could be. Passive constructions require a past participle, so use rented rather than rent.

× the greenhouse gas

✓ greenhouse gases

The statement refers generally to emissions from cars and other vehicles, so the plural greenhouse gases is more appropriate. Do not use the before a general plural noun.