Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你直接回答了问题，也提到了自行车是谁送的，这是有效的细节。不过，“It it”重复；“for my 10 years old birthday party I remembered”表达不自然。可以说“for my tenth birthday”，并补充一个具体细节，例如你常骑它去哪里或有多喜欢它。注意答案控制在五句以内。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my tenth birthday, and I was thrilled because it was my first bike. I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends.

提案: 你表达了赞同的态度，但“ I greater agree with it”应改为“I strongly agree”，而“especially for this year's”意思不清楚。你可以先直接回答，再说明自行车受欢迎的原因，例如环保、节省交通费用或方便短途出行。避免重复使用“popular”，并用“because”把理由自然地连接起来。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. Many people use them for short trips because they are affordable and produce no emissions. They can also help people avoid traffic jams.

× It it was a gift my father gave me for my 10 years old birthday party I remembered.

✓ It was a gift my father gave me for my 10th birthday.

“It it”重复使用了主语，造成句子结构错误，应删除一个“it”。此外，“10 years old birthday”不符合英语表达习惯，应使用序数词“10th”修饰“birthday”。

× I greater agree with it

✓ I strongly agree with it

“greater”是形容词或比较级形式，不能这样修饰动词“agree”。这里需要副词修饰动词；“strongly agree”是自然、正确的表达。

× especially for this year's

✓ especially this year

表示“尤其是今年”时，通常直接说“especially this year”，不需要介词“for”。“this year”也不需要使用所有格形式“year’s”。

× Because, uh, problem of environmental back is popular and popular for today's life.

✓ I strongly agree with it, especially this year, because the problem of environmental back is popular in today's life.

原句以“Because”开头，但没有与主句连接，单独构成了不完整的句子。应将原因从句连接到前面的主句中。“for today's life”也不符合此处的介词搭配，改为“in today's life”。

× problem of environmental back

✓ the problem of environmental back

这里的“problem”是特指的环境问题，作为单数可数名词需要使用冠词。此处加上定冠词“the”。