Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one specific detail about where or how often you rode. Avoid repeating “bike” and replace the unnatural phrase “the time when I was riding the bike” with a more natural expression. Explain what made you feel excited.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to school, and I loved the feeling of cycling along the quiet streets with my friends.

提案: Give a clear answer and avoid fillers such as “you know” and the incomplete phrase “And it’s more popular that.” Use accurate wording, such as “motorbikes are more popular,” and explain the difference between bikes and motorbikes. The point about cars being inconvenient is unclear, so either explain it or leave it out.

例: No, bicycles aren’t very popular in my country. Motorbikes are much more common because they’re convenient for getting through busy streets, and you can see them almost everywhere.

× It's more popular that people ride motorbike in the streets.

✓ It's more common for people to ride motorbikes in the streets.

The structure more popular that people ride is not grammatical in this context. Use more common for people to + verb to describe a common activity. Use the plural motorbikes when referring to motorbikes in general.

× It's more popular that people ride motorbike in the streets.

✓ It's more common for people to ride motorbikes in the streets.

Motorbike is a singular countable noun, but it is used here to refer to motorbikes generally. Use the plural form motorbikes. Alternatively, you could say a motorbike to refer to one unspecified motorbike.

× You can see these motorbikes everywhere and it makes the cars not convenient.

✓ You can see these motorbikes everywhere, and this makes driving cars inconvenient.

The original joins two independent clauses with only a comma before you can see, creating a comma splice. Use a full stop or a suitable conjunction to separate or join the clauses. The corrected version also uses this to refer clearly to the widespread presence of motorbikes.

× It makes the cars not convenient.

✓ This makes driving cars inconvenient.

The definite article the is generally not used before plural nouns when speaking about them in general. Use cars rather than the cars. In this context, driving cars is a natural way to express the general activity.