Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答问题，再用一到两句解释原因或补充经历。注意使用过去时：应说“when I was a child”，而不是“when I was child”；“my mother's my father”表达不清，可改为“my parents”。避免重复“when I was ten”，并确认“cart”是否指玩具车或其他物品，选择准确的词。

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my parents thought it was too dangerous. When I turned ten, they gave me a little toy cart for my birthday instead.

提案: 第一句没有清楚回答自行车在本国是否流行；请直接说明你的观点。接着用具体例子解释，并说明自行车与地铁或摩托车的关系。注意表达“在中国”等地点时使用自然语序，例如“in China”或“in cities like Shenzhen”；避免使用含义不清的词组，如“citizens populous”和“Hinas”。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. However, in large cities like Shenzhen, many people prefer taking the subway because it is faster and more convenient. Some people also use electric bikes to get around.

× I was child

✓ I was a child

可数名词单数 child 前通常需要冠词。此处应加不定冠词 a。

× my mother's my father thinks a bike is very dangerous when I was a kid

✓ my mother and father thought a bike was very dangerous when I was a kid

这段话描述的是童年时父母的看法，应使用过去时 thought；与过去时间相对应，is 也应改为 was。另外，my mother's my father 的结构不完整，应改为 my mother and father。

× my mother's my father

✓ my mother and father

原表达把所有格形式 mother's 和 my father 直接拼在一起，句子结构不成立。表示“我的妈妈和爸爸”时，可用 my mother and father。

× And when I was ten years ago, when I was ten, my mother and my father sent me a cart for my birthday present.

✓ When I was ten, my mother and father sent me a cart as a birthday present.

when I was ten years ago 结构不正确，而且后面又重复了 when I was ten。直接保留 When I was ten 即可。表达“作为生日礼物”时，用 as a birthday present 更合适。

× my countries

✓ my country

此处谈的是学生自己的国家，应使用单数 country，而不是复数 countries。

× citizens populous

✓ bikes are popular among citizens

populous 表示“人口稠密的”，不能用来表达某种交通工具“受欢迎”。这里应使用 popular，并补出句子的主语和谓语，例如 bikes are popular among citizens。

× I think by citizens populous in my countries and the countries I see is China.

✓ I think bikes are popular among people in my country, and China is the country I know best.

原句缺少清晰的主语和谓语，by citizens populous 的词序也无法构成完整句子；后半句 the countries I see is China 结构混乱。可以按“我认为自行车在我的国家很受欢迎，而我最了解的国家是中国”来组织句子。

× In China like Shenzhen, the prosperous cities, people always choose subways to go outside

✓ In prosperous Chinese cities such as Shenzhen, people always choose the subway when they go out

原句中 In China like Shenzhen 与 the prosperous cities 的连接方式不清楚。用 such as Shenzhen 引出城市例子，并把地点短语调整为 In prosperous Chinese cities，结构更完整、清晰。

× people always choose motorbike

✓ people always choose motorbikes

这里泛指人们选择的交通工具，motorbike 应使用复数 motorbikes。