Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense: say whether you had a bike. Then add one or two clear details, such as who bought it for you or what you enjoyed about it. Avoid repeating words like “but,” and make sure each sentence expresses one complete idea.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me, and I thought it was really cool. I used to ride it around my neighborhood, although I wasn't very confident at first.

提案: State your opinion clearly at the beginning, then support it with a specific reason or comparison. Use “bicycles aren’t very popular” rather than “it’s not popular,” and avoid repeating “in our country.” Finish your thought by explaining how public transport or cars affect cycling.

例: Bicycles aren’t very popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people prefer buses and the subway because they’re convenient for getting around. Also, some people find driving more comfortable than cycling.

× I have a bike in my childhood that is bought for my father.

✓ I had a bike in my childhood that was bought by my father.

The sentence refers to childhood, a completed time in the past, so use had instead of have and was bought instead of is bought. Use the past-tense form consistently when describing a past event.

× I have a bike in my childhood that is bought for my father.

✓ I had a bike in my childhood that was bought by my father.

The bike was purchased by the father, so the passive construction needs was bought by my father. Use by to identify the person who performed the action.

× But it's not popular in our country because we have the more convenient transport in our country, maybe the bus, the subway, the car and in our country, in our cities, we don't in our.

✓ Bikes are not popular in our country because we have more convenient transportation, such as buses, the subway, and cars.

The question is about bikes, which is plural, so it's does not agree with the intended subject. Use bikes or they instead. The ending is incomplete and unclear, so it is omitted from the correction.

× But it's not popular in our country because we have the more convenient transport in our country, maybe the bus, the subway, the car and in our country, in our cities, we don't in our.

✓ Bikes are not popular in our country because we have more convenient transportation, such as buses, the subway, and cars.

The is not needed before more convenient transportation in this general comparison. Omit the when describing transportation in general, and use such as to introduce examples.