Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly by clarifying that your father owned the bike and you rode as a passenger. Use past-tense forms consistently, such as “had,” “was,” and “went.” A driving licence is not necessary to explain that you could not ride as a child, so focus on the shared trips. Add one specific detail about a ride, and use a natural phrase such as “those were wonderful memories.”

例: I didn’t have a bike of my own, but my father had one when I was a child. I often rode with him when he went to buy groceries. I remember enjoying those short trips, especially when the weather was nice.

提案: Give a clear yes-or-no response, then explain why bikes are popular. Use “affordable” or “fuel-efficient” instead of the ungrammatical phrase “in the budget friendly.” Clarify whether you mean motorcycles, since you mention the Splendor model, and support your point with a specific example. Avoid fillers and use correct subject–verb agreement.

例: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country, especially in towns and cities. They’re affordable to buy and maintain, and they’re convenient in heavy traffic. For example, many people choose the Splendor because it’s comfortable and fuel-efficient.

× Actually my father have a bike when I am child, but I did not have driving license and did not know how to ride a bike and uh how to drive on it.

✓ Actually, my father had a bike when I was a child, but I did not have a driving license and did not know how to ride a bike or drive it.

The speaker is describing childhood, so the past-tense forms had and was are needed instead of have and am. Use the past tense consistently when describing events or circumstances in the past.

× Actually my father have a bike when I am child, but I did not have driving license and did not know how to ride a bike and uh how to drive on it.

✓ Actually, my father had a bike when I was a child, but I did not have a driving license and did not know how to ride a bike or drive it.

Driving license is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before it when referring to a license in general.

× So I go with my father on rides and buying groceries on trip.

✓ So I went on rides with my father and bought groceries during our trips.

The sentence describes past childhood experiences, so use went rather than go. Bought is also the past-tense form needed to keep the actions in the same time frame.

× So I go with my father on rides and buying groceries on trip.

✓ So I went on rides with my father and bought groceries during our trips.

The original sentence joins go with buying, which does not make the actions parallel. Use two past-tense verbs, went and bought, to describe the actions consistently.

× So I go with my father on rides and buying groceries on trip.

✓ So I went on rides with my father and bought groceries during our trips.

On trip is not the natural preposition phrase here, and trip needs a determiner or plural form. During our trips clearly expresses when the grocery shopping happened.

× That will be really amazing moments for me.

✓ Those were really amazing moments for me.

Those moments is plural, so the plural demonstrative those is needed instead of that. Match demonstratives to the singular or plural noun they refer to.

× That will be really amazing moments for me.

✓ Those were really amazing moments for me.

The speaker is describing past memories, so use were rather than will be. Use past-tense forms when talking about experiences that happened in childhood.

× Uh yeah, bikes are most popular in my country is uh, it is in the budget friendly and splendor model was most comfortable and budget friendly for all the peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are budget-friendly. The Splendor model is the most comfortable and budget-friendly option for everyone.

The original sentence joins clauses in a confusing way, including bikes are popular and is. Separate the ideas into complete sentences, and use because to introduce the reason.

× Uh yeah, bikes are most popular in my country is uh, it is in the budget friendly and splendor model was most comfortable and budget friendly for all the peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are budget-friendly. The Splendor model is the most comfortable and budget-friendly option for everyone.

The answer describes current popularity and a current preference, so use the present-tense verb is rather than was. Use the present tense for general facts and opinions that are still true.

× Uh yeah, bikes are most popular in my country is uh, it is in the budget friendly and splendor model was most comfortable and budget friendly for all the peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are budget-friendly. The Splendor model is the most comfortable and budget-friendly option for everyone.

People is already the plural form used for a group in this context. Peoples usually refers to distinct ethnic or cultural groups, so use people rather than peoples when referring to everyone generally.

× Uh yeah, bikes are most popular in my country is uh, it is in the budget friendly and splendor model was most comfortable and budget friendly for all the peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are budget-friendly. The Splendor model is the most comfortable and budget-friendly option for everyone.

When most expresses a superlative comparison, it usually needs the before the adjective. Say the most comfortable model, not most comfortable model.