Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly: “Yes, I did.” Avoid saying “a bicycle rather than a bike,” since the words are nearly synonymous. Use the natural phrase “learned to ride by myself,” and break up the long sentence. Add one specific detail about where you rode or how you felt.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I learned to ride it with my friends on the quiet streets in my neighborhood. I still remember how exciting it felt to ride around together.

提案: State clearly what you mean by “bikes” (motorcycles or bicycles), and use natural phrases such as “young people are interested in” and “dream of buying a new motorcycle.” Avoid repeating similar ideas like “attracted and drawn towards,” and support your answer with a specific reason or example.

例: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in India, especially among young people. Many people like them because they’re convenient for getting around and can be more affordable than a car. You often see groups of friends riding them in cities.

× I had a bicycle when I was a child rather than a bike, and I have such nostalgic experiences with that as I learnt it by my own along with my childhood friends on those really beautiful streets across the neighborhood and it was such a great experience whenever I think about it.

✓ I had a bicycle when I was a child rather than a bike, and I have such nostalgic memories of it because I learned to ride it by myself along with my childhood friends on those really beautiful streets across the neighborhood. It was such a great experience whenever I think about it.

The natural preposition in this expression is memories of something, not experiences with that. Use of it to refer back to the bicycle makes the reference clearer. In this context, because also expresses the reason for the nostalgic memories more clearly than as.

× I had a bicycle when I was a child rather than a bike, and I have such nostalgic experiences with that as I learnt it by my own along with my childhood friends on those really beautiful streets across the neighborhood and it was such a great experience whenever I think about it.

✓ I had a bicycle when I was a child rather than a bike, and I have such nostalgic memories of it because I learned to ride it on my own along with my childhood friends on those really beautiful streets across the neighborhood. It was such a great experience whenever I think about it.

By my own is not the correct form. Use on my own or by myself to mean that you did something without help. Here, learned to ride it also clearly states what you learned.

× Yes, they are quite popular in my country in India as the youth is more attracted and drawn towards the bikes, especially the girls as well.

✓ Yes, they are quite popular in my country, India, because young people are more attracted to bikes, especially girls.

The original uses the plural pronoun they to refer to young people but then uses the singular verb is with the youth. Rephrase the subject as young people and use the plural verb are. Especially girls also fits more clearly as a phrase identifying which young people are attracted to bikes.

× These days they are having this fantasy of buying new company bikes and riding them and it feels really cool to see the people.

✓ These days they have this fantasy of buying new company bikes and riding them, and it feels really cool to see people.

Have expresses possession of a fantasy here, so the simple present have is more appropriate than the present progressive are having. The simple present is commonly used for states and ongoing situations of this kind.