Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提供了上学骑车和把自行车当作朋友的细节。不过，“in my birthdays”和“a ride bike”表达不自然；可说“for my birthday”和“a bike”。注意时态一致：讲童年经历时用过去式“rode”。减少“uh”等填充词，并用连接词自然衔接细节。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mum gave me one for my birthday, and I rode it to school every day. I was very fond of it because it felt like a good friend.

提案: 回答没有直接说明自行车是否“受欢迎”，而是转向谈它的重要性；开头应明确回答“Yes, they are quite popular”或“No, not very popular”。“friendly for a health body border”意思不清，可改为“good for people’s health”；“no pollution for environments”可改为“they do not produce air pollution”。使用“because”或“also”连接理由，并补充一个具体例子，例如通勤或短途出行。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. They are good for people's health and do not produce air pollution. Also, they are cheaper to use than cars, so many people ride them to work or school.

× Yes, when I was a child, in my birthdays, my mom gave me a ride bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my mom gave me a bike on my birthday.

表示“在某人的生日那天”时，通常用介词 on，而不是 in。可以记住搭配 on my birthday。

× Yes, when I was a child, in my birthdays, my mom gave me a ride bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my mom gave me a bike on my birthday.

这里说的是某一次生日，应使用单数 birthday，而不是 birthdays。改成 on my birthday 后，单复数也与表达的意思相符。

× I went to school, uh, ride it every day.

✓ I rode it to school every day.

这段话描述童年时的习惯，时间背景是过去，因此 ride 应使用过去式 rode。也可以把句子简化为 I rode it to school every day。

× And uh, it's like my friend.

✓ And it was like my friend.

句子描述的是小时候的自行车及过去的感受，因此 be 动词应使用过去式 was，而不是现在式 is。

× Well personally I think it's very important on the one hand it's friendly for a health body border and on the other hand it's no pollution for environments and cheaper for people.

✓ Personally, I think bikes are very important. On the one hand, they are good for people's health; on the other hand, they do not pollute the environment and are cheaper for people.

原句把多个意思直接连在一起，句子结构不清楚；此外，it's no pollution 的结构不正确，因为 pollution 是名词，不能直接作为 it is 后面的形容词补语。可以拆分句子，并用 they do not pollute the environment 表达“它们不会造成污染”。