Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add the useful details about when and where you rode. Correct the run-on sentence by adding punctuation after “Yes, I did,” and say “a two-wheeled bike” rather than “a two cycled bike.” Replace “very fun” with the more natural “a lot of fun” or “really enjoyable.”

例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a two-wheeled bike in sixth grade, and I used to cycle around a park near my home with my dad and sister every weekend. It was a lot of fun and helped me become more confident.

提案: Give a clear answer about bikes in Korea, and develop it with a specific reason or example. Use “they” to refer to bikes, and say “along the Han River” rather than “in the park near Han River.” Finish with a complete thought instead of “and yeah.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially in cities like Seoul. For example, many people cycle along the Han River because the bike paths are well maintained and offer a pleasant place to ride.

× Yes, I did I learned to ride a two cycled bike in sixth grade and I would cycle around a park near my home every weekend with my dad and my sister, which was very fun and helped me become more confident.

✓ Yes, I did. I learned to ride a two cycled bike in sixth grade, and I would cycle around a park near my home every weekend with my dad and my sister, which was very fun and helped me become more confident.

Yes, I did and I learned are separate independent clauses, so they should not be joined without punctuation. Put a period after did. A comma before and also helps separate the two main clauses that follow.

× Yes, I did I learned to ride a two cycled bike in sixth grade and I would cycle around a park near my home every weekend with my dad and my sister, which was very fun and helped me become more confident.

✓ Yes, I did. I learned to ride a two-wheeled bike in sixth grade, and I would cycle around a park near my home every weekend with my dad and my sister, which was very fun and helped me become more confident.

Two cycled is not the correct adjective to describe a bike with two wheels. Use the compound adjective two-wheeled. Hyphenate it when it comes before the noun bike.

× I think it is quite popular in Korea, especially in the park near Han River because the bicycle tracks are well constructed and yeah

✓ I think they are quite popular in Korea, especially in the park near Han River, because the bicycle tracks are well constructed, yeah.

The question asks about bikes, which is plural, so the pronoun it does not agree with the noun being discussed. Use they, and use the plural verb are with it.

× I think it is quite popular in Korea, especially in the park near Han River because the bicycle tracks are well constructed and yeah

✓ I think it is quite popular in Korea, especially in the park near the Han River, because the bicycle tracks are well constructed, yeah.

The conventional name of this river is the Han River, so the definite article the is needed before Han River.