Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提到了自行车的品牌和来源，但需要注意时态和表达自然度。描述童年经历时应使用过去时，例如将“do have”改为“had”；“from brand mini BMW”可改为“a Mini BMW bike”；“a gift by my aunt given to me”表达重复且不自然，可简化为“a gift from my aunt”。建议先直接回答，再补充一两项具体细节。

例: Yes, I had a Mini BMW bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my aunt, and I was really excited when I got it.

提案: 观点明确，但“low carbon waves”用词不准确，可用“low-carbon ways of travelling”或“environmentally friendly transport”；描述现在的趋势时，用“are choosing”或“choose”比“will choose”更自然。另外，“a convenient way for going out”可改为“a convenient way to get around”。建议补充一个具体原因，并用连接词让回答更连贯。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. More people are choosing them because cycling is an environmentally friendly and convenient way to get around, especially for short trips.

× Yes, when I was a child I do have a bike and it's from brand mini BMW and it's a gift by my aunt given to me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bike from the Mini BMW brand, and it was a gift from my aunt.

这句话描述的是童年时拥有自行车以及自行车当时的来源和赠送情况，应使用一般过去时。原句中的“do have”应改为“had”；“it's”应改为“it was”。描述过去发生或存在的情况时，注意将动词统一调整为过去式。

× Yes, when I was a child I do have a bike and it's from brand mini BMW and it's a gift by my aunt given to me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bike from the Mini BMW brand, and it was a gift from my aunt.

“brand”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。表达品牌时可以说“the Mini BMW brand”。注意可数名词单数通常不能单独使用，应根据语境加上“a”或“the”。

× Yes, when I was a child I do have a bike and it's from brand mini BMW and it's a gift by my aunt given to me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bike from the Mini BMW brand, and it was a gift from my aunt.

表示礼物的来源时，通常用“a gift from someone”，而不是“a gift by someone”。“by”通常用于表示动作的执行者，例如被动句中的施动者；表达礼物是谁送的，应使用“from”。